February 12th, 2013 at 08:45am
Supernova - Comments
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Please update soon I really love this story do far! Keep up the good work :)))February 12th, 2013 at 05:55am
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I really like this. It's a strange idea, but it's really good. I like Angelo in this too. He's a tortured soul and is completely possessive without even trying to be, or realizing that he is.
Keep up the good work!
& since I try to add some constructive critisism into every comment I write, I was thinking that maybe you could detail the setting a little bit more. Like, tell what each person is doing relative to their position in the room. Example:
“Where are you going Angelo?” I asked him.
“To the couch, I don’t want you to feel like my embrace is too controlling.”
Could be better by jazzing it up a little bit:
“Where are you going Angelo?” I asked him, slowly pushing my hair out of my face so that I could gage his expression better.
He met my gaze, his eyes challenging and disappointed at the same time. “To the couch," he explained bitterly, "I don’t want you to feel like my embrace is too controlling.” He turned and left the room silently, causing me to sigh and fall back against my pillow in defeat.
Also, I just wanted to let you know that I noticed a few wrong words/letters, such as accidentally writing "people" instead of "pillow", "eying" instead of "eyeing", & "sens" instead of "sense". Not a big deal, but these are easy fixed if you take the time to read through it a couple times. (:
Overall, it's good though. I really like the dynamic between them.February 12th, 2013 at 05:29am -
Love how Ange is being a pissy ass bitch 'I'm going to the couch' lol Great job!February 12th, 2013 at 05:22am
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>.< I love how possessive Angelo is, but I'm probably not supposed to <3 Update soon, loving this :)January 31st, 2013 at 02:50am
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I really like this. Keep doing what you do girl <3 Now I have to get caught up on your other stories :DJanuary 30th, 2013 at 10:14pm
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i love this a lot! update soon.January 30th, 2013 at 10:05pm
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Finally!!! Haha this was an amazing update though, update more asap!January 30th, 2013 at 09:56pm
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You took your time didn't you? Great chapter though, i love how this is laid out. Keep it up!January 30th, 2013 at 08:40am
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Freaking finallyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D been wanting more of this.January 30th, 2013 at 07:54am
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Great job! I've been waiting for this update! I look forward to reading more in the (hopefully) near future.January 30th, 2013 at 04:21am
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Great job! I've been waiting for this update! I look forward to reading more in the (hopefully) near future.January 30th, 2013 at 04:21am
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I'm so excited this story was updated. I kind of forgot about it for a bit but now it's just so fucking cute especially with Ange as a gargoyle. :)January 30th, 2013 at 04:08am
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My feels!!!!!! So fucking cute!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Ange as a gargoyle! Cause he loves them!January 3rd, 2013 at 10:07am
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I've never read a story based on someone being a gargoyle before. ;o And it's an Angelo one. XD
I cannot wait for more :3<3.January 2nd, 2013 at 02:12pm -
I'm very excited for this story.January 2nd, 2013 at 08:36am
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Oh my more, I love this Angelo fanfic, I haven't been able to find any decent ones and this one is amazing! C:January 2nd, 2013 at 04:53am
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Yesss, I'd been look for an Angelo Fanfic for the longest, and this one seems really interesting ^~^January 2nd, 2013 at 04:41am
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that's awesome that they're gargoyles! haha, i loved the update! it's exciting. update soon! <3January 1st, 2013 at 01:26am
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This is beautiful and unique! I can not wait to see where you go with this!January 1st, 2013 at 12:40am
I can't wait to see where this goes. <3