January 10th, 2013 at 06:04am
The Thickening. - Comments
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You're incredible at detail and description -I can feel ever itch of pain and despair in this written work. I can also mentally see this carrying out in; ever bite and piece. It's such a dark form of literature, but I enjoy it due to how well it has been executed. Great job so far!January 10th, 2013 at 06:03am
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@ MrBlackwaterPark
Yeah, well, the whole "unnecessary gore" part in parenthesis probably should have clued me in.
Anywho, again, good job :) January 10th, 2013 at 05:00am -
@ Ashes to Graphite
Thanks a bunch, and that was the point of the story's four-word summary, to get the reader to believe it would just be another story like all the others...
Sorry for not warning you though about the content...haha :) Thanks again for reading!January 10th, 2013 at 12:34am -
Ok that was pretty much horrifying.
I need to compose myself a little bit after that, my head is literally spinning. Alright, not literally, but it is sort of... bluh...
Okay, at first I though, oh another story about self mutilation. I've read a few of these, how bad could it be... Unfortunately for me I didn't look at the rating on it before hand, so I was not prepared for so much... blood.
Excellent writing though. I was so caught up in the events, I didn't really catch any errors or anything or things writing-wise that I can comment on. My one suggestion would have to be on the layout. It is cool looking and everything, but at the bottom of the picture (before it repeats) it gets really dark, and it's hard to read the black font on that bit. I found myself scrolling up and down to adjust where the particular paragraph I was on fell. But, that's just a layout, thing. Congrats on completely throwing me for a violent loop. :)January 10th, 2013 at 12:11am
Thanks, I guess :)