This layout is extremely pretty, I love the colors and the banner, how softly colored it is. I just think it's gorgeous altogether.
- and when your brother do things he is not : Is and supposed to be capitalized or something supposed to go before it? I don't know, you could have done it on purpose c: Disregard that part if it was intentional. - He owes money to some gang for drugs. Ayla know about... : He owed money to some gang for drugs. Ayla knew about... - it is the same. maybe we forget... : it is the same. Maybe we forget... - around 7 years old, I was... : around seven years old, I was... - ”mommy and daddy will be here to protect you baby, so will your brother.” she... : ”Mommy and daddy will be here to protect you baby, so will your brother,” she... - not now, here's no... : not now, there's no...
This is pretty interesting, I don't see a lot of kidnapping stories on here and I like how you started it. It is pretty interesting so far, and I would like to see where you're going to take this. Sorry about these corrections I pointed out, but I know that if someone else were to read and correct it they would probably say the same too. The number thing, I usually don't mind but people got on my back about it before so i'd just like to save you that trouble. c: I hope it's not too harsh or anything, good job so far.
- and when your brother do things he is not : Is and supposed to be capitalized or something supposed to go before it? I don't know, you could have done it on purpose c: Disregard that part if it was intentional.
- He owes money to some gang for drugs. Ayla know about... : He owed money to some gang for drugs. Ayla knew about...
- it is the same. maybe we forget... : it is the same. Maybe we forget...
- around 7 years old, I was... : around seven years old, I was...
- ”mommy and daddy will be here to protect you baby, so will your brother.” she... : ”Mommy and daddy will be here to protect you baby, so will your brother,” she...
- not now, here's no... : not now, there's no...
This is pretty interesting, I don't see a lot of kidnapping stories on here and I like how you started it. It is pretty interesting so far, and I would like to see where you're going to take this. Sorry about these corrections I pointed out, but I know that if someone else were to read and correct it they would probably say the same too. The number thing, I usually don't mind but people got on my back about it before so i'd just like to save you that trouble. c: I hope it's not too harsh or anything, good job so far.