lets see... there is nothing "wrong" with your story, however it feels like it need more. usually the main charecter needs to experience some sort of arch, within the context of the story they need to change their way of looking at the world or make an important decision. at te onset of the story the two charecters have already resolved to go to the clinic so going to the clinic and checking in are already the obvious and expected actions. My suggestion would be to either, do a more careful study of craig, ow e became a drug addict, what made im make the decion to get clean, how his treatment went, or of chelsea, how she met craig, how his drug use affected her what she did while she was alone etc...
January 3rd, 2013 at 08:43pm