I love the layout it's pretty rad. I like this story, very interesting. The third chapter's first line seems like a run-on sentence. Yeah, it has commas and hyphens but still seems way too long.
In the first paragraph, did you mean to put 'minding my own business' ?
I like the vocab usage in this story, good job. ;D
@ Goldyfish in the prologue, "We were riding it the carriage with Anna and Momma when there was a commotion outside" It should be in. And maybe in the second chapter when you saying "So they were happy with a little playful kiss here, just to entertain ourselves" I don't know if you meant to put it or if it made since to you, but I didn't too me, I think you should've said here and there, just to entertain ourselves.