Hello, there! Okay, it is an interesting start and I'm eager to see how you continue this story. A head's up, however, I picked up on a few spelling mistakes, so you might want to fix those when you have the time! Other than that small detail, I'm really looking forward to reading more.
For the spelling mistakes, just copy and paste the story on Word, and easy peasey, that will certaintly point out the errors. Anyways, I'm definitely subbing! Hope you update soon ~ Good luck, dear writer!