Oh I like this (: A lot actually. The only advice I'd give is to capitalize the beginngs of your sentences, purely because you could get reported. It doesn't bother me much. But..
Okay so yeah, I like, and you left me with such a cliff hanger! D: Update very soon please :)
@ Andy Belle thanks. and I can't do much to the grammar myself I'm sorry. I hope you can live with it. but just as you know I've seen it worse somewhere :)
@ FallenCreature thanks <3 (I don't think you sound like a bitch you're just being sweet)