December 22nd, 2013 at 04:30am
Hello there! Part two of your Mibbamas gift ^_^
This is a rather intriguing idearrr. Your writing style flows here so well! I like the transitioning between the characters' thoughts. The prologue was strong, characterizing your characters. The fact that age doesn't matter between Akane and Kiyomi is beautiful. At least they just have someone to keep them company :3
No grammar mistakes :)
I like this story a lot. I'll definitely be subscribing.
But you have a very simple yet informative way of writing. You are good at describing things while not making them boring or having too much information. This seems to be off to a good start; keep it up! ^^