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frickingfuentes (100)

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awwww

March 26th, 2013 at 11:02am

turtlee (100)

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you keep re entering the last chapter D;

March 25th, 2013 at 10:59pm

O_____x (100)

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UHMMM THIS SHIT IS GOOD MK
UPDATE MK
MK
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March 4th, 2013 at 06:31am

Freak Disaster (100)

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Oh no, lhadlhdasdhasd DX
I am seriously dying DX haha
Please update more :3<3

February 2nd, 2013 at 06:30am

squidgyyo (100)

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Why would end it like that ?! :(

February 2nd, 2013 at 04:10am

MelissaIsAce (100)

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keep up the good work!

February 1st, 2013 at 06:26pm

rooneytunes (100)

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@ Idgaf_guys
I couldn't have put it better!

January 31st, 2013 at 10:36pm

frickingfuentes (100)

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emergency? o-oh....

January 31st, 2013 at 07:51pm

Idgaf_guys (100)

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I like the new chapter! You're getting much better at an effective and gracefully written plot.
KEEP IT UP; AWESOME JOB. :D

January 30th, 2013 at 02:33am

MelissaIsAce (100)

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hehe knew it, only criticism is i wish the chapters were longer <3

January 29th, 2013 at 09:20pm

SennyLivesForMusic (100)

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I like the way you write :3 (just saying)
Anywhooooo, HOLY POOP I WASN'T EXPECTING THAT! Craaaayyyyy! Can't wait for the next update!!!:D

January 29th, 2013 at 08:10pm

Idgaf_guys (100)

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Okay, I don't want to sound rude or anything, but as a fellow author, I should give you constructive criticism.
First of all, your grammar and mechanics. There is a difference between "your"-- as in that belongs to you-- and "you're"-- as in you are. I found the mistake reoccurring in this piece. Also, your capitalization and sentence structure needs some work as well as your use of, erm, proper English. "Heeey" isn't something you would want to formally use in any writing to express a way someone said something. Now moving on to your actual story-- the plot line isn't bad (I find it interesting, really). But, even with a good plot line, you will fail to make a story as a whole if it is not developed yet. It seems a bit as if your story is trying to fly but keeps falling to the ground-- judging on the way you write the thing out. Elaborate more on details and use more literary devices such. Speculate more on specific parts of the story where it seems like you jump from one part to another-- make your transitions more graceful. Keep it up, lovely. :)

January 29th, 2013 at 03:15am