Casually Cruel - Comments

I love the way he talks to her ! Really good story btw.:)

this is such a cute story, i really enjoy it so far!!

I really like this, and the new layout. I love how you begin the chapter with lyrics because I think it's a nice way tot set the mood. The two finally met, which makes me happy!! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Please keep updatng!!! I love this story so far!!! It's so simple yet so entertaining!

I really like the title of this story, is it a lyric of Taylor Swift's?

You layout is very nice too by the way, clean, easy to read.

The summary is interesting too, definitely a classic love story type.

Chapter One: Very short, but overall the shortness wasn't that bad considering it gave an introduction of Drew. And the interaction between the two seemed very normal for two young guys to talk about.

Chapter Two: I like that you have ATL lyrics at the start of the chapters. I find that it is probably going with the theme of the story, yes? Lot's of dialogue in this chapter, which is fine because it seemed like a flowing convo to me, however I would have liked to see more description of actions and what's going on around them and stuff.

Chapter Three: This was a real short chapter lol, not that that's bad. But I think it would have been a prime opportunity to describe the other characters of the story such as Taylor and Colton.

Overall though this story seems good, but I'm not sure what the plot is. Anyways, I think you are doing good for what it is right now.

=D

While the plot line thus far seems a little bit predictable, your writing style doesn't falter with it. There is effort behind it, and I love that you don't have filler: it is precise and simple. The layout definitely compliments this aspect of your writing style here because it goes along with the simplicity. I also like the tinge of unknown that goes on in the chapters like what did happen at the last party? It makes the reader want to read more.

The character development is believable and their dialogue is conversational; something I think a lot of authors struggle with. The only thing I really will critique is the block of description for Jenna Lee in Chapter 3. This may be a personal preference, but it irks me when writers describe the littlest things like that in a huge block. I would suggest maybe weaving the description in throughout the story.

First off, I really love the layout. I think it's really fantastic and really lovely. I think it's super simple but perfect for a romance story.

Chapter One: I love the interactions between Drew and Ty and I think it's really true to how people act around each other. I think they're friendship is really amusing and entertaining and I find it funny. I can't wait to see how they react in the future chapters.

Chapter Two: I love how Jenna-Lee is absorbed in her book. That's something I do all the time and I think you've captured that sort of personality really well. My only critique for this is that you've mentioned someone named Colton, but we have no idea who that is. So maybe define who he is and his relation to Jenna-Lee or Lisa.

Chapter Three: Drew's description of Lisa is absolutely beautiful. Lisa sounds really pretty from your description.

The only thing I can think of as a critique is maybe add some more descriptions of the surroundings and how people look. I really really like your writing style. It's simple and clean and makes it easy to read, but still engaging. Keep it up :) I'm subbing :D

It's intriguing. I like it. Keep it going :)