February 23rd, 2013 at 11:06pm
Firstly, the idea is pretty awesome. I haven't seen much else like it at all. Your introduction is interesting and gripping, and I love how you have Blaze willingly go with Grandfather Henley. It shows a lot about the trusting nature he has. I don't think that people understand that enough about kids, but you seem to have done a really good job with that here. Your characters are well thought out as well, which is great. I'm still unsure about Rune, I don't know whether I like him or not, haha!
The only thing I could notice was that in the sentence I made a face and Rune, pinched my arm hard, the comma isn't needed. Aside from that, I couldn't spot anything else.
This is a great story. I'll be subscribing so that I can see what happens with Blaze!
Whoa, thanks for the comment! I was thinking that no one really liked the story, :P. Thanks for the correction, I'll fix that up immediately.