Girl On Fire - Comments

this is so good :) please update soon ♥

And I was right, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

How slow do they have to be Jesus guys, u just made it clear tht u don't care about a girl's personality only her appearance and since Alanna is a supermodel u made it clear tht u r only hanging out with her becuz she looks beautiful not for her personality, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

@ whenwefirstmet
Well I changed it, I'm not sure much people would notice that much on how long they were away for. It's just a number but it's changed. x

I know but it's not very realistic, no need to get defensive, it was just constructive criticism.

@ whenwefirstmet
It's a story..

This is good but no one would be on tour for 8 months especially in a tiny country like the uk lol they'd have to play like one show a month

I'm loving this story already, she kinda sounds like a Victoria secret model Adrianna Lima but with green eyes instead of blue, anyhoo the reaction on Jack, Zack and Rian's face when they realized tht Alanna looks nothing like the girl from high school is priceless man and poor Alex got insulted pretty much for being cocky, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

I like it :)

sounds good so far, definitely has potential.

sounds great so far continue