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  • Anya Tepes

    Anya Tepes (100)

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    It seems too jumpy. I would like more background to the characters as well as character development.
    February 6th, 2013 at 02:34am
  • Raggy1D

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    OK thanks! What do you mean by more substance though?
    February 5th, 2013 at 04:17am
  • Anya Tepes

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    Wood is Scottish not Irish. I would suggest more substance to the story. Wood's professional quidditch team is Puddlemere. This is interesting and I would like to see this develop.
    February 5th, 2013 at 04:05am
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