Love Among Duty & War - Comments

I got here from comment swap.

Firstly I really like the layout. It's pretty, but not overly bright like some of the ones on here.

I was already hooked just with the summary. I think you've written this excellently. The plot is very strong, it leaves it self open to so much, there are endless possibilities. I can't find many mistakes spelling or grammar wise, so that's a plus.

Top marks for this.

The layout is beautiful and you do a wonderful job creating an aura around the summary that makes me want to read more. I think you do really well of keeping in the correct language throughout your narrative and your dialogue for the time frame you're writing it. The only thing I think you need to change is when Irina calls the Princes 'hot' and 'loser' that just doesn't fit for me at all. Prehaps calling them 'handsome' and 'fools' or something along those lines. It just doesn't fit the narrative or era at all. Otherwise I think you've done a very lovely job. You have a great use of vocabulary and description. Overall it's a very nice story so far. :)

So I found this story from the comment swap, and I am certainly glad I did!! I love these types of stories! I was immediately drawn in and your descriptions made the characters come alive! I barely saw any grammar errors, which is great! I love your idea of having a girl knight! It's unique! I am subscribing! Please update soon!

You're a nice writer. I also like the color scheme going on in your layout. Keep it up! :)