Basorexia - Comments

Chapter five I liked it. Course I like Adam's bad boy thing going on I would prefer him with her if he wasn't a drug dealer. course on the other hand I really like Hunter and I just can't wait to see where this story is going.

Chapter five I liked it. Course I like Adam's bad boy thing going on I would prefer him with her if he wasn't a drug dealer. course on the other hand I really like Hunter and I just can't wait to see where this story is going.

Chapter five I liked it. Course I like Adam's bad boy thing going on I would prefer him with her if he wasn't a drug dealer. course on the other hand I really like Hunter and I just can't wait to see where this story is going.

Chapter three and four. I like them both and I liked how chapter four ended. The story has very good potentially.

Chapter three and four. I like them both and I liked how chapter four ended. The story has very good potentially.

So chapter two I liked but slightly confused the guy Hunter is the guy she met from the first chapter?

So I said I would comment and I would. I liked the beginning but I absolutely loved the ending.

Comment swap.

Title
Although I have never heard the word before, I could tell that it had to do with kissing by the first time I read your title. I love learning new things (especially if there are diagnosis on the DSM or the ICD classification codes for diseases and illnesses), so I looked it up and I couldn’t come with any scientific research on it (I was disappointed). Anyways, the title, yes, it is simple and I like how it is related to the contents of your story.

Layout
I’m not fond of the layout. The background colors are okay (I actually like simple background colors); what I do not like, and this is my opinion, is the banner and how it scrolls down with you. The positioning of both the banner and the story content look cluttered, so I wasn’t fond of that either.

Summary
I liked that you gave a definition of the title and the very short summary that you provided; it doesn’t give out too much from the story (aside from the part that Emily likes to kiss ); it gives enough without giving too much.

I have to admit I was put off by the part of the summary in which you describe it as a love story because I have something against love stories (personal preferences, really), but then the “but not” part made me smile a little, because I’m assuming (and perhaps wrong but I like the concept) that this won’t be a love story, but rather a lust story and I like this

Content of first chapter
Emily sounds very distanced from her family and I wish I knew why; even her addict uncle is still included in the family matters, but she seems to be excluded (maybe she does this to herself?) I really am interested for the reason behind this.

For some reason I keep picturing Emily as a little girl, same goes for Adam, maybe it’s his snotty comebacks or her bratty attitude, but they do sound like children that speak like adults. I suggest a little bit more of character development in this area because it can lead readers to mistake the characters as immature and one-dimensional.

I really like the descriptions and the flow of the story. I like that you spend time describing each family member according to how Emily sees them as opposed as to how you as the author envisioned them; I also liked the little flashbacks here and there onto Emily’s past.

The plot seems to evolve slowly, so this is good because you are not rushing to it and it doesn’t look clumsy or cluttered with information.

Overall
I thought it was an interesting first chapter. You provided a good hook for the readers in how you delivered the introduction of the characters and the situation.

Comment swap~

Oh, never heard of Basoerxia, sounds kind of weird to be honest. I honestly thought it was a mental disorder but after I read your summary, it's all clear to me now. I like your chapters, they're not too long to where they hurt my eyes to read and you give just the right amount of information in each. I can't say I enjoy how Emily and Adam's relationship escalates. But all in all, you've done a great job!

I love the story. :) Cant wait for the next update!

Plot twist! She is so screwy with boys ahahaha

Aww Cali's adorable:) love this sooo much!!!!

I loved the update.
It's awesome.
:D
Please update soon?!?!?!?!?!

Reading > sleep. Tried to shut down computer, but I was too curious about what happens next so I guess I'll read the whole thing right now :)

So far I only read chapter one and I love it! Sadly, I can't continue with reading right now because my eyes are so so heavy. Your writing style is - in my opinion - amazing, perfect for me.

Comment Swap

Well, your title is very interesting! At first, when I was given this story in the comment swap feature, I thought it might be some sort of mental disorder, but then I read the little bit you give in the summary and was pleasantly surprised.

I like the length of your chapters. It doesn't cut people short on information, but they aren't so long that it takes ages to read. And the story itself is very interesting. This poor girls family... Well, they are quite dysfunctional, aren't they? A whole big, interesting mess.

Then Emily and Adam... Their relationship escalates quickly. For me, I like things to be gradual or, when I'm coming into a story, to have some sort of previous basis in which the events characters are currently doing make sense. Adam and Emily's relationships is sort of fast for my taste, but interesting, I guess.

Anyways, this is a fairly good story. The only thing I saw a problem with is your sentence structures and I noticed that they got better the more I read.

Good luck!

@stillTryingtobreathe Yeah :/ girl's got some issues, that's what her rapist used as an excuse, that he "liked her" I'll clarify later in the story.

So she was raped? Is that why she flipped?

Awe poor Emily. :(
I feel bad for her.
Please update soon?!?!?!?!

This seems really interesting! Cannot wait for the next update :)
Love Katherine-Lynn <3