March 2nd, 2013 at 02:36am
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I'm having a really hard time getting into this, even though the concept seems pretty interesting. I also think this could be very good but your writing is sort of like an impermeable bubble and is quite hard to get into ^^
So this is a really interesting idea but I found it a bit confusing to stick with the plot. I'm sure when you'll continue it it'll be clearer but now it's just hard to follow. This is a interesting beginning though. Good luck!