Wrong/Right. - Comments

I didn't mean to do that. :shifty
I was planning to edit my comment on the first page. :tehe:
But since I'm here, thank you Av. Thank you everyone. :arms:

That was absolutely amazing. I swear. :cheese:

The imaginary and the thought processes of Gerard, as well as the construct, flow of the story. It just worked so harmoniously.

Necrophelia. I’ve always gagged at the thought of the topic. My heart jumpstarts and my head spins and I feel like I’m on one of those teacup rides at the amusement park that spin around like crazy and make you nauseas. Suddenly, sex with dead people doesn’t seem as wrong as it may have seemed a week ago. I mean, what does it matter if he’s dead? I mean, I’d regret if I just drained his blood, injected the embalming fluid and fixed him up to look all spiffy and sent him on his merry old way to his funeral before a quick fuck.
I just love how the thoughts just flow through this paragraph. How the idea suddenly pops up, and the way he ponders what he previously thought of the idea. Similar to the way a normal person would do before they mull over an option that is presented before them. I adore how you make him somehow convince himself there is nothing wrong with the idea, despite how twisted the idea is.

Wait, do dead people have souls?

I couldn't help but smile here, it's as if his conscience has intervened. I don't know if it's me but I can just picture this conflict within Gerard over what's morally right/wrong. The depiction of that seems to be evident throughout the story until Gerard finally decides he is going to go through with this. Then just the way you unfold the series of events after that, it just happens so wonderfully.

I found the ending so unexpected but I guess that's what makes this story a lot more quirky other than the necrophelia of course. :tehe:

I think for the topic, you've just executed it just so marvelously with such eloquence. Well done. :cute:

I liked this a lot...
...weirdly.

Have I ever told you, I love you?

this was well-written.
it might have been sick, but it was stunning.
Corpses are my only companions.
that made me sad&i don't know why exactly

The familiar metallic feel of the barrel of the gun against my burning flesh calms me down a little – but not enough. Nothing would ever be enough. I inhale deeply again, exhaling ever so slowly. My last breath; make it count.

“Be seeing you,” I mutter to his corpse before I ineptly pull the trigger. Bang.
best ending ever. no lie. that made me almost cry. it was beautiful, in a twisted way.

good job.

^ :cheese: Thank you both. So, so much.
I felt so weird when I posted this, and thought everyone would hate me, but now I feel... proud.
(:

That was stunning. I've never read anything like this before.
The way you described the corpse was vivid, real. Like there was one in front of you when you wrote this, and the formality of it seemed to build to Gerard's character.
He was a strange man, and his words were strange too.
Stunning.

Fantastic imagery.
Second necrophiliac story [the first was a Snow White remake] I've read.
I'm still not disappointed.

Part of me thinks I should be disgusted, but there's something about the twistedness that's enthralling. What's so fucking orgasmic about cold skin and stiff ribs and listless eyes?

Funny how you made Gerard think the same. :XD

I like it. No, I love it, actually. It was short, it was kind of like a 'moment' story [a scene caught in time, in the middle of something], and it was just right. Leaves you begging, but satisfied. Does that make sense? No, but neither does necrophilia.

Your story gave me a kick. Love it.

^ :arms: ily more Arianna.
Thank you for the wonderful comment.
That made my day.

Ew. :hand: You > me. teh end.

Good comment, y/y?

In my head world, I’m trying to picture what his death was like. Sadly, that’s how I get my kicks – picturing my projects final last minutes. From the clean bones jutting out of his gray skin and the pools of oxidized crimson decorating his body, I assume his final minutes consisted of a bloody battle. Rarely do I ever get a bloody corpse to work on. I am suddenly enthralled. My customers tend to die peacefully in a peaceful position. This guy is just gruesome. A smile creeps across my face.
This part lets you knw just how fucking sick Gerard is. "Ohai. I iz creepface y/y? YAYZ. HE DIED AND IT WAZ BLOODEH! HUZZAH"

My heart jumpstarts and my head spins and I feel like I’m on one of those teacup rides at the amusement park that spin around like crazy and make you nauseas.
That was a good comparison. Ever one God's green Earth knows what it feels like to get off one of those rides and want to spew your lunch all over the place.

Scratch that, I’m the only soul with a working, beating heart that currently feels like it’s going to shatter my ribcage and I’ll end up like him, dead.
-le gasp- FORESHADOWING.

My identical blue jeans fall down around my ankles and I pray to God that I do not trip. I trip anyway. It is a sign. God hates me for my act of Necrophelia.
Haha. I liked that part. It shows how bad Gerard thinks the whole thing is, but he doesn't really care.

I moan, speeding up a little and intertwine my bony fingers into the greasy mop of hair sewn into his skull.
I like how it said "sewn into his skull" instead of "on his head". It just proves how dead Frank really is.

I inhale deeply again, exhaling ever so slowly. My last breath; make it count.

“Be seeing you,” I mutter to his corpse before I ineptly pull the trigger. Bang.
Most wonderful ending, my love. It was flawless.

I believe you should dedicate this to Arianna :file:. She inspired you with her/ Alyssa's random screaming.

And stop writing so much Frerard, dammit!

:arms: ily <3

Lmfao. When I read the first sentence I was like "Hey dumbass, he DID kill himself" xD

You best :file: I just left you like a 100000 word comment depicting what I felt about every damn sentence xD
But kidding, you don't need to leave me a better comment.
You are better than me.
*puts hands over balls protectively*
xD

Ew. Gerard needs to like... I dunno, kill himself.
LOLZ. HE DID.

I'll leave you a better comment later, me swear.
But ew. If you ever say I'm better than you ever again, I'll kick you in teh ballz.

Woah. Thank you.
The idea just came to me when my friend just randomly yelled that at the mall tonight. I figured frerard was just a pairing that fit perfectly with my fucked up plot.
:arms:
But anyway, like I was saying. Thank you. I'm glad you liked it!

Wow. I just saw this on the Pimping/Reccing thread and just...wow.
This is one of the first times I've ever seen necrophellia in a story, and the few other times I saw it, it was extremly horrible and made me want to get sick.
However, this was absolutely disturbing but just incredible at the same time. Not to mention that it was very well written. I know that I would never be able to write anything like this so congrats to you for daring to write about such a controversial subject.

Anyways, I'm rambling so amazing story, I'm glad I clicked onto that thread now. :)

this is fantastic!
fucked up, but fantastic
you should turn it into a story where gerard and frank meet in hell or heaven and get together :)
:)

Well that was disturbing.
But wonderful nonetheless.
The topic of necrophilia is always something you should write about.
Makes people kinda go 'ew', you know?
:]

KEEP IT UP :finger:
i'm watching you. :weird

we are galaxies.:

IF YOU DELETE THIS I WILL KILL YOU.

...It was niceee. ^_^

Kristen, you are wiiiiiiiin.
:arms:

Thank's for the comments, everyone. I was pretty unsure of the reaction I would get by posting this. (:

we are galaxies.:

IF YOU DELETE THIS I WILL KILL YOU.

...It was niceee. ^_^

wil u fuck her dead lifeless body?

haha!
jk
jk

hehe

i hate when ppl say 'jk'

dude
it was awesome. sick, but awesome. hitler was a necrophilic! hehe. bad hitler...

ok

dude, that was cool n the ending. i didnt 'expect it at all! so sudden! i was like "what the fucks he doing in the drawer? did i miss something?"

hehe

don't delete it! maybe add a bit of meat to it's skinny ass bones, but yeah! haha skinny ass...

ok!

yeah? keep?