A Pretty Girl is Like... - Comments

I really love how infatuated he is with her. It's like he doesn't even know that much about her, but he is still so intrigued by her and just wants to know more. I think that's how a lot of relationship like that are in real life, especially in like a high school type setting or with teenagers. You watch some one from afar and have all of these ideas about them and who they are on the inside, and then you may learn that what you thought about them wasn't true at all. I thought this was really great and I love the way you described everything!

I absolutely adored this piece. :)

This is really sweet :) You really got across his emotions and how much he wants her but also how much he can't have her :P

One thing I picked up on is that there are a lot of really short sentences and in some places its appropriate and works really well like 'He fell in love and she disappeared. He remembers her but it's blurred.' but some sentences can be extended just to make it flow more smoothly.

I really liked this piece and the last two paragraphs were a great way to finish, well done!! :)

First off, I really love the summary. Short and sweet while also describing the story. I never know what to write when it comes to summaries. The story itself is really well-written, and the only thing I personally would change is the amount of he/she's as sentence starters. It might be my English Lit student brain talking, but I'm always looking for more interesting and varied sentence starters. I love that she can't be described as anything but 'pretty' by the guys. It shows almost a superficial love, as it will never be real because she flits about from guy to guy, abandoning them. Yep, I definitely like this one-shot, very imaginative.