One Night Stand - Comments

You sure know how to get a girl hot and bothered- serious Brian feels at the moment!

Although there was more dialogue at the beginning with very little description in between, you made up for that with the descriptive smut scene as well as the scene on the dance floor. You're very good at the smutty scenes, I must admit

To be honest, I could sum this entire story up with three words... HOT AS FUCK! Another great piece, well done chick

@ TwIsT.LiCk.DuNk
Lol it's alright, I'm the exact same way when I'm looking for something to read so you don't have to feel bad. Thank you so much for your comment, I'm glad you liked it. I actually had to go read the story over again because I forget all about what happened in it haha.

I must admit, one of the reasons I click on this story is because Alyssa Milano is the cover photo. It's not that I'm being petty and do all that judge a book by its cover thing. But it's just like buying a book, you'll pick up something that caught your eyes first, and then read the synopsis at the back of the book and if you're interested, you'll try reading it, right?

So that's what I do. I'm interested at the cover, I click on it, I read the summary and I'm also interested to know the whole story so now I'm reading it. Oh my, I'm rambling about things that are irrelevant to the story, my bad, I'm sorry.

Now, back to the actual story comment. I'm gonna comment this as I read as I notice I comment better when I do it like that. So here goes! ^_^

The first line, is it weird that I read it in a sing-song voice and I imagine Matt's voice in A Little Piece of Heaven? LOL! And her boyfriend's name is Cole!

I totally love picturing Brian in his aviator and leather jacket. The image is too sexy for me to handle. It's just...

Taking off his jacket, he handed it to me and I slipped it on. Immediately I could smell his scent on the jacket and I took a big sniff. Damn he smelled amazing.

Awww... Brian... that little gesture was just too sweet. I want to smell his jacket too. I think I have some sort of obsession with his leather jacket. He just looks too damn good in it.

Oh, damn! The sex scene was really, really hot! I love your description and damn you Brian with your filthy mouth, you sexy beast.

Your writing is really good. I don't notice any errors but my English isn't perfect as it's not my first language. And I also don't notice any spelling errors which is a plus. I'm totally digging this one shot and I love the ending.

So now, how will she get back? LOL!

@ synful_desires
Its called Fuck U Betta by Neon Hitch

I want to know what happened next she realized she left her car at the bar!!!! D: I loved it, it was so sexy! Hey, what song is that she was singing to Brian at the bar?

Nom that was so hot!

That was such a good ending- just the 'aw fuck!' about forgetting your car, but whatever. Wow...this was fucking hot! Very steamy, and Brian's dirty talk...dammit, everyone seems to love giving that man a filthy mouth- not that I'm complaining of course, I love it when he talks like that. God, I wanted to be in her position so badly! But anyway, I'm getting off topic. Great one-shot hun- thank you so much for entering!

Good luck! What an awesome oneshot! That was so hot!!

Would you consider Turing this into a full story?

I would like to say good luck! Also I think this is a very awesome oneshot! Well done dear!