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thanks dude, i need to figure the layout stuff, i'll continue i just didnt feel like writing much today :P

I actually like it. All this story needs is a nice layout and longer chapters. I liked the way you wrote your characters, how you had the word "uh" and "Duh" here and there. It made it sound more humanly! Plus, I could easily connect with the character. Your words flowed together greatly! I like it, continue writing pwease :D