Awwwwww. Poor Soph. I mean, I dunno how to feel. If she wakes up, maybe she could fall for Harry....? I mean, he's there for a reason. I hate that she feels this way and that it hurts that Liam is moving on, but I would hate for Liam to break Sam's heart. He had time to say goodbye. Soph needs to work out a way to say goodbye :/
I don't usually read 1D fanfiction (I'm not a massive fan) but this is awesome. The plotline is really original and this is really well-written! I love seeing both Sophie and Samantha's sides of the story, it lets the reader into the feelings of both girls and I think that's really fantastic. Your writing styles both gel together really well, which is important in co-writes. You guys really do work well together. The description is flawless, the writing flows really well and the characters are really well fleshed-out so far. I'll definitely be subscribing so I can see what happens next!
I really, really like this! The summary was really intriguing, and I love what you wrote. But could I make one tiny suggestion? Your very last sentence was very long, and a comma or period to separate the sentences might make it sound better.
She whispered to herself, putting hers back on the stove and dropping the other in the box before going to her room to get a good night’s rest before her first day at the hospital.
Maybe like this: "She whispered to herself, putting hers back on the stove and dropping the other in the box, before going to her room to get a good night's rest for her first day at the hospital."
Or something like that, so it isn't a run on. Hope that helps you! (:
Awww shiz son, things are already starting to go down. So, I got very confused when I read the names Sammy and Summer ha but after I realized it wasn't just a mix up in names, I got over it. I can't wait to read more :D