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It's so funny, I found this because I'm in a very particular mood where things for me seem to fade away to pastel, and I was trying to find something which reflected that and stopped me from staring at a wall for twenty minutes. I typed in something like 'soft' or 'quiet'..

This is something like what I suppose I was expecting, but also something entirely different. I love the short updates, the emotion. I love the turn of phrase you employ here, the little metaphors and well-placed words that make something which seems so angry and dark become something so natural and calm. It's sort of like a disturbance right down on the sea floor, of that makes any sense. I feel as if if you were to blink, you'd miss something very urgent and important.

This story is the kind of unsettling that makes you think about it long after it's over. Excellent, excellent job.

Post soon please.

Gosh, I love this. I love how there's sex and yet its so artfully written it sounds like something much deeper than that is going on. And even just the comparison, slight but still there, between her time with Sam and her time with Reed. It's really great what you have here. I can't wait to see the drama unfold!

This story is so beautifully written; why doesn't it have more recognition?

Wow amazing chapter :) seriously loved it! Can't wait to read the next one.

OH I LOVED THE LAST CHAPTER. SO GOOD. I just, it makes me really root for Reed but then its like but Sam is so cute, and its like which one should Cath be with idkk. But I really liked how they met and how she chased him and that's just so cute. I feel bad for him now.

WAIT I DIDN'T NOTICE SAM HAS THE FACE OF ONE OF THE HARRIES' TWINS OK I LOVE HIM EVEN MORE IF THAT'S POSSIBLE

Ok, I'm an awful friend because I haven't caught up until now. This story is actually wonderful. I want a Sam. Sam sounds cute and adorable and a really good kisser. But I'm just imagining that last part. I disapprove of your status there and hope that you do write a resolution because even if you don't get that much feedback, YOU HAVE ME!!!!!! But I understand if that's not enough. ily ok and this story too.

I will never get over how well you write. In fact, I'm insanely jealous! It's probably the reason it took me this long to catch up. Just kidding. I don't even know the reason for that. I just want your talent. Give me your talent.

ily and update soooon bb <3

Oh, I love this so much. I like that Cath isn't perfect. I hate those perfect protagonists, that like can do no wrong, and just aren't human, I guess?

Your writing.. It's beautiful. I'm disappointed that you didn't continue. You have such a way with words, it's almost breath-taking. I adore it. I'd love if you were to continue on with this particular piece. (:

"I feel as though there’s a thin, red string tied to my core that leads right back to Sam’s, it’s pulling me to him like an anchor to the ocean floor."

This. Oh my god. This line = love.

Oh and this. This is so beautiful: "his hands and lips all over my face, as though he was trying to map them in his mind so he would never forget them."

Ah I love this story. Can not believe what's happening between Cath and Sam and what I THINK is gonna' happen.

I love it. The flow is just amazing, how you keep on switching back and forth yet it's still telling the same story. The words flow with it...everything just flows.

wtf is even happening
it's so intriguing
ugh I hate you for having such amazing skills
please update soon
or don't because I might hate you even more
just kidding
<3

Uhm, so I love this already, and I really wanna know why Cath feels she shouldn't be with Reed so yep, please write more and update soon so I can be appeased :)

Wow, this is wonderful. It flows really well and you write like a queen! This story is so perfect I am desperate for more. Absolutely beautiful.

damn this story's brilliant so far, i love the layout and the last sentence of the first chapter was great. fuck it's rare to find good stories on here ya know and i really like this. definitely subscribing and recommending

Hi there!

I don't have a lot of criticism here, because I think that the writing is quite beautiful. The descriptions are perfect, the word choice, the characteristics, everything about it is fantastic.

The only thing that stuck out to me was this:

I'm disappearing in you Catch," >> There should be a comma before Cath, since he's addressing her. ("I'm disappearing in you, Cath.")

That was the only thing that was astray though.

The only other thing I was curious about is how your shuffling the time? But I suppose I'll find out as you update more.

Great job with this, I can't wait to read more!

xxx Bee

This already so interesting. Update again soon, please!

oooooo
this is interesting
update!