Saudade - Comments

Like others said, I really liked the summary. I think it set up the story quite well. I always admire people who write true stories, my life has never been interesting enough for that

There was a ton of information in the first chapter, which I think was good in some ways but also not so good in others. It helped set up the story so the reader knows what's going on and where the main character is coming from with her actions, but there was also so much going on that I got a little bit confused. I think it was because the chapter really jumped around a lot, so it was a little bit hard to follow.

Other than that though, I think this has a lot of potential. Good luck writing the rest!

Looking forward for an update

I agree! The summary was excellent. It makes you want to dig into this story.

I like the storytelling tone. It really seems like someone talking to me and telling me about their past.
The first chapter didn't mess around. You got a lot of information all at once.
I look forward to the characters fleshing out. I feel like this chapter went into the time and the place.
We met a few people, but didn't get a lot of descriptors. I liked the addition of her friends \ sister. The comment about hitting her was a bit disturbing though...
Overall a great introduction and I look forward to reading more.

Summary:
I absolutely loved your summary. It definitely pulled me in and had me looking forward to the story.

Chapter One:
I honestly didn't expect her to rebel like that, though once most middle schoolers rebel once, they become addicted and start doing it again and again. I'm worried about what her parents are going to say to her.
I don't like the fact that she started using her dad. He seemed like a very kind man. Ugh, children, I swear.
This chapter was definitely an info dump, which can be really daunting on most. I will admit that it was a lot to take in, but I appreciated the fact that you introduced your characters slowly and gave the reader time to get to know them just a bit before introducing the next character.
I really enjoyed your descriptions and the image you created and I didn't see any spelling/grammar mistakes.
Honestly, I want to see where you go with this, so I'm subscribing! Well done.