Bite Marks - Comments

I really liked this! I love how you've used the prompts; it's very original. I will admit, to begin with I was rather unsure about what the whole plot was about but when Alexander was introduced, things clicked.

Your descriptions were wonderful, as they always are. The mundane activity of looking for one's cat is a great contrast to the mysterious nature of meeting Alexander. I feel that, as the reader, we are drawn to this strange man just like the girl. And with the bite scene, you give it a sensual atmosphere which leaves us craving more at the end.

I adore your writing style so much. It's beautiful and enticing. To me, this story held quite a dreamy, trance-like tone which made it perfect for how it ends.

Great stuff!

@ viralstorm

I've spent half my time looking for my cats I might add on to this one day. Thank you for the comment.

Damn Snowflake! If the cat wouldn't have disappeared she would be perfectly fine. Then again, she wouldn't have met Alexander to begin with. I haven't decided if I think it was a beneficial experience or not. Haha. I really don't like how he asks if she wants all of him, and then all he does is suck her blood. Like where is the smut scene? Baha. Definitely needs one, before she passes out.

There where a few errors, some capitalization you missed in the third paragraph from the bottom. There was a repetition in the sixth paragraph from the bottom as well. You said "got got"

I really enjoyed this! I was a little bored with the beginning, because I couldn't figure out why she was trying to desperately to find the cat. I guess I lacked empathy for her, so that was all me. I have cats and I would never look that hard for mine. LOL!

Definitely wish there was more to read, you should think about continuing it, maybe?

say yes.

This is cool. I like descriptiveness of Alexander and how you made me feel drawn to him like the girl was. The bite was also well described. It was a very interesting story, I liked the mystery. All around it was pretty good.

This is really good, love the descriptiveness of the bite.

this is good you should do comment swap to get more comments ;-)