June 30th, 2017 at 06:00am
Master Vengeance - Comments
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Wow! Just found this and I loved it! It was hot and spooky. Perfect August 7th, 2013 at 12:10am
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Damn....I loved this one shot babe!April 7th, 2013 at 12:37am
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Damn woman that was so hot. I'm literally fanning myself here. Oh lordy, I agree with ZV - Master Vengeance come to Mama :pApril 7th, 2013 at 12:20am
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Master Vengeance come to Mama...
Damn this was so hot to me in a slightly messed up way! I think I may need to go see someone about this, but I''d rather recreate this with Zacky. Someone please make it happen, I'll give you cookies! As always, babe, an AMAZING one-shot!April 6th, 2013 at 06:30pm -
Wow.
Wow.
I don't even.
What is this gloriousness that I just fucking read?
Oh, my, God. I... I don't know what to really say, this was so very well written and the way it ended, I wasn't expecting that. Amazing. March 30th, 2013 at 04:43am -
wowwwwwwwwwwww that was very goodMarch 17th, 2013 at 05:44pm
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@ purple89
Would have made for an interesting story though ;) but definitely- I love this!March 17th, 2013 at 12:52am -
@ Synful Cocktail
thank you!! that means a lot...i tried to be creative with the confession...trust me when i say that this confession was a bazillion times better than the one with the trampoline you originally sent me...i think if i had done that one it would have ended with someone breaking their neck and losing a spleen...lolMarch 17th, 2013 at 12:24am -
My oh my oh wow oh my god.
I fucking loved it! I really did! The way you started it off as a dream then that little twist at the end! I fucking, my body so wasn't ready for any of this! The confession was incorporated beautifully and it was all well written!!! I loved it!March 16th, 2013 at 11:23pm -
Whew, I loved this!!! I really like how you ended it too! It was sexy. Well done lady:)March 16th, 2013 at 09:53pm
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I absolutly love this! My mind is now in the gutter and thinking of dirty things lol.
Thank you so much for the one-shot and I hope you win the contestMarch 16th, 2013 at 09:47pm -
@ CherryV
comment virginity to you!! woot woot!!! the beast and the harlot is one of my favs too so this was fun to write!March 16th, 2013 at 08:31pm -
Comment Virginity!! Mwahaha. I started to read this as I was getting ready to go out and now I've forgotten what I was doing... God damn woman that was amazing!!! Loved the twist at the end! And I loved the fact that Beast and the Harlot was incorporated into it, one of my favourite songs and videos!! I wish there was a button for "I freaking love this!" HahahaMarch 16th, 2013 at 08:29pm
I thought this was a unique take on a smut story. I liked how you made it so it felt like a story set in some odd world in the past, but it turned out to be a dream. I imagine the setting is like that in the music video? Since she wakes up after having the video on repeat. That whole situation felt very realistic, having real life impact her dream. I also enjoyed that, though this story was obviously heavy on the smut, there was also a plot there and it really told a story. You had some creepy vibes going on at the end and I thought that added to the rest of the story really well.
Something I wanted to point out was having the entire story in italics was super distracting. I feel like if you just had the dream bit italicized, it would have a much better effect. Or if you wanted to have fact that it's a dream be more of a surprise, have the bit at the end where she wakes up italicized. But having the entire thing in italics just seems unnecessary.
Overall though, this was an interesting story. Thanks for entering!