March 23rd, 2013 at 12:17am
Comment swap~
Well, this was fairly short. My only complaint is that you have the summary the same as the first chapter, which might turn readers off, or they'll just skip over the chapter. Another thing I saw was your spacing was a bit off. You might wanna put another space between paragraphs so people will be able to read it easier. Didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes and you have a pretty sweet layout. Good job!
This was interesting, but I have to agree that it's pretty short. Also, the spacing in between paragraphs and dialogue are off, so it strains the eyes a teeny bit. There's not enough written for me to comment on the storyline, but good job so far :)