March 28th, 2013 at 02:32am
this is a really interesting concept. it would be cool to see this developed further.
just a few things i noticed: you keep changing tense ever so often which kind of threw me off when i was reading. There were a few simple grammatical errors as well.
All in all...a really interesting take on the whole angel of death/guardian angel theme
oh goodness I am terrible at grammar, I don't know how I passed anything in English during High School. But thank you for reading this and telling me some of my errors because it really does help me in the long run ((: