@ Thalkon Roiy Denn Sorry! It was a rough week for writing. I'll go through and edit, my next story won't have different point of veiws. Thank you for the feedback.
There was some grammatical errors, which made it hard for me to read, but that's just because it's me and I have issues with that. Other than that, it's still going good. I was having a problem with the POV changes, it gets a little confusing, but if I oriented myself with the characters a little more, I'm sure I'd do fine. Keep up the good work. :)
There was some grammatical errors, which made it hard for me to read, but that's just because it's me and I have issues with that. Other than that, it's still going good. I was having a problem with the POV changes, it gets a little confusing, but if I oriented myself with the characters a little more, I'm sure I'd do fine. Keep up the good work. :)
@ Thalkon Roiy Denn Thanks! :D I will go through my story and edit the spacing. Also, I barely started the next chapter. Ahaha It may be out next week!
I love cliff hangers and I hate them -_- Update soon...also, you're paragraphs are kinda hard to see, if you could double space them? You're preference...I still like the story and can't wait to read more...keep up the good work :)
Sorry! It was a rough week for writing. I'll go through and edit, my next story won't have different point of veiws. Thank you for the feedback.