Somewhere Between Smirnoff and London - Comments

Keeeeep going!

@ j.lynn
Ehehehe twirls moustache thanks :3 he seems like the gentelmanly type and I usually make the male characters douchebags in my stories; so I figured I'd try something new.

@ Daughter Monster
Yeah, it's just so cute the way you have Tom acting!!

@ j.lynn
I'm thinking of doing so. I want to eventually publish it as an original fiction novel; so if I do continue it it won't be fanfiction anymore lol... we'll see how many people are interested THEN xD

@ Daughter Monster
Aww yeah, you should seriously think about making this a full story!!!!

@ j.lynn
..I am at a loss for words, so I'll speak in gifs.



sdajsnecnfdjfm thank you so much you made my day <3

This is so nice!! I actually giggled at the end and I am going to look your other stories up now!!!!

LOVED it good job!!

@ M_Courtney_R

Thank you :) it took me like a week to write it so I'm glad it's actually enjoyable ^.^

I'm so glad that you asked me to read this, I really enjoyed it!

I only found one mistake,
'I gathered the blankets to my body and slowly got up; my feet noiselessly stepping its way across the soft, black carpet.'
It's probably just me but that sentence doesn't make sense. I think it should be
'my feet noiselessly stepping their way across'
But that's just me...

Now onto the good bits,
1. I love that Tom is so caring, it's rare to find a story were the main male character is described as an ass and it's even more rare to find a story where the writer manages to make it work. Your description isn't choppy and doesn't seem forced.
2. The story is realistic. Sure, it is unlikely that you have a drunken one night stand with a guy that is actually a decent human being. But the plot is more realistic than others. I'll be genuinely surprised if I ever come across a story written as beautifully as this.

Courtney :)

I must say, in my four years on the site I have never read anything Tom Hiddleston and after reading this- I'm regretting it! This was wonderful. I love the way you portrayed him, he was so sweet- a nice change actually as so many men (especially those of a one night stand) tend to be complete and total jackasses. Though I think what I loved the most, was how you left it wide open. As a reader you left me wanting more, which is always a wonderful thing. If you ever decided to write a follow up to this, please let me know! I would certainly read it!

I think my only real issue with this is the spacing between dialogue. Without it, it can become easy for readers to be confused, especially with dialogue. But that is an easy fix.

Over all, I loved this. It was well written, and like I said it left me wanting more- something so many fail to achieve, especially with one shots.

Bravo! This was wonderful (:

Thanks so much!