You Love Me When I'm On My Knees - Comments

Ahhh I'm so happy you updated! I absolutely adore this story and this chapter holy shit. They actually got along! And patrick is just a fucking cutie!!

glad that you posted more, and i hope that after school is out for the summer you post more to this. i'm loving it so far

We are alwyas here bby. :) just remember too keep consistence :)) beautiful chapter love<3

This is amazing like oh my goodness! <3

I LOVED THAT SOOOOOOOO MUCH!

oh Alex, you go girl. Joyce is amazing, Jack's so funny with his mum :')

WOO! :) turned out to be fab! And i agree people are better than two :3

hush up alex you loved getting spanked

Omg, Joyce is fucking awesome! Totally digging her. Yeah! You go Alex.

Guys I am really really really sorry for the slow update. I don't have school because I live in South Dakota and we're having freaking snow storms in April. Which means I can work on a few chapters I got some inspiration so i'll write more tonite hopefully my chapter will be posted by tonight. I need to revise some stuff to make it better and then i'll post it but it's finished I promise! Thank you for being patient with me. Just these past few days school has been hard and I'm getting depressed again (not that i want sympathy or anything). I know it's an excuse but i hope I can make it up to you guys

@ makethekidsbelieve
I'm definitely keeping Alex's rebelish persona. I'm not going to have Jack break it because Jack likes it. I'm always going to make Alex a little stubborn but he's going to show sides to Jack that he wont let anyone see. I'm not going to make them a fluffy couple ( sorry for anyone who was hoping that) but there will be a point when they are a couple. But you'll see in the next chapter (which i finally finished!) that Alex is not going to submit to Jack. I will make Rian and Zack bigger parts in this fic since you asked. i didn't decide what to do with them but now I'll make them like apart of it a lot. And I now have a beta which is nice! Thank you for the suggestion

My suggestion for the grammar is to get a beta :) I'm sure since you sai you loved all time fanfiction you know they have a beta list ;) I know typing on a phone is hard (that's what I'm doing now so my comment will probably be crap lol) and safari likes to be annoying sometimes so maybe write it up in the notes app ten copy+paste it online? That way safari won't crash. I really like this so far and I've been looking for a fic like this so I'm very happy to have puns it. More Zack and Rian please because I just love them unconditionally in everything because there's never enough of them! Also, I'm not super knowledgeable about Dom-sub stuff but maybe at one point jack could see Alex's inner conflict with himself about giving in vs staying true to who he was before and take pity on him. I get that he's a Dom (and a hot one whoo) but I would kind of hate to see Alex's whole rebel persona crumble so quickly with no sympathy from anyone's. but then again like I said I'm not an expert on this so that may not be possible? Anyways keep up the great writing :)

I'll put out a new chapter today, sorry for the slow update i've been working all weekend at all hours and when i get home i'm just dead tired but my boss informed me today that i don't have work until six so i have a good 8 hours definetly enough for me to write maybe a few chapters :) thank you for being so patient with me

@ Kennedy71199
Thank you I love you so much! And yeah sorry for the slow update and all I had to work all weekend so when I got home last night my ass went to sleep then I had to work all day I will try and upload a chapter tonite to make up for it. I know it sad Alex has no friends maybe Matt will show up or something idk the way I made Alex was that he don't give any fucks if he isn't liked. Jack is sexy all the time and my favorite member of atl. Thanks a butches for the love and I know there are no alt fics like this I see some frerard like this but never any alt fics

okay... let me just start by telling you how much I love this story! I've been looking for something like this FOREVER! So you are now one of my favorite writers on mibba! :) I love the concept, the characters, the societies status-quo, everything! So thank you! Okay, so some points I want to make... Can I do them in numbers?... I'mma do them in numbers, hehe.
1.) I fucking adore Zack and Rian's relationship/dynamic, but for some reason it makes me sad for Alex not to have a friend really.
2.) DAMN JACK IS HOT! Not just his looks, but his fucking attitude in this fic! I love it!
3.) Alex getting spanked for his disobedience to Jack, really hot! haha
4.) PLEASE UPDATE THIS AMAZING FIC SOON!?!?!?!?!? (sorry don't wanna rush you, but i'm desperate for it now!) hehe

@ jacksboner
I so don't hate you for telling me the truth. It needed to be said. I am extremely sorry for the grammar issues i need to work on that like i need someone else to proofread my work before i put it out. I know this is kinda an excuse but i write the fics from my Iphone and a lot of times it will auto correct stuff and i'll go back and make a ton of corrections. I'm not putting all the blame on my phone I mean i do need to work on past/present/future grammar stuff. You think getting an A in composition would make me a better writer. Yeah the smut was shitty I wish i would have wrote it better. I was kind of in a hurry to just produce a new chapter but it'll still on excuse I do need a lot of work i will definitely try to work on it and take your advice with the moans and such. As for Alex's father I really don't know what his deal is. I thought that maybe it'll have to do with their past. He doesn't know alex is resistant towards being a sub but he seems mean to him I think I was doing that solely because he was a dom but i'll make it something better than that. I really do appreciate the criticism. As hard for me as it is to read that we all need someone to do that. It makes a writer better but i will definitely work on what you told me I might go back and revise the chapters of at least fix the grammar mistakes. Thank you <3

I really like this, it's an interesting idea to say the least. I'm trying not to make this comment too lengthy so as short as I can put it, here it goes. First of all, I don't really know much about doms and subs and I really have never been into BDSM but I'm really confused towards Alex's dad..does he hates Alex because he's a sub or something? Because he just treats him so badly and I don't know if it is because he's a dom or if it's because he doesn't love him. Also, and this is just an advice/suggestion/you word it according to what's best for you, some people (like me) are really picky when it comes to grammar, and I just love this fic so much and please don't hate me for this because I'm saying it with the best intentions possible, try to pick up a tense and write accordingly to it, wether it'd be past, present or future tense 'Jack pushed Alex down the bed and straddled his back, then grabbed his arms and placed them against the headboard' (I changed it a bit, but you get the point across) and when it comes to Alex's or Jack's "explicit moans" to call it one way or another, it's not necessary for you to drag out the moans, so for example 'S-Seventeen! A-Ah! Jack! Hnngh/Mmmn/Hmmpft/Mhmm'. I hope this made sense and that you don't hate me, I'm just trying to help out a bit, and I do love this fic and it's really interesting and I can't wait for more.

I never read about dom/sub fic before, this is really interesting. Can't wait for more! :)

omfg yes yes yes yes

I love joyce as well she is quite the funny one :3