Save Me - Comments

@ sowrongxitssara
Dude! Thank u so much!!! <3 you've made my day! :D

I just started reading this tonight aaaaaaaand I love it. :) I can't wait to read more <3

@ Ohdamnbby12
Anytime!! :D and oh ace! I accepted ^.^

@ PTV-OMAM-MIW95
Dude. Thank you so much!!! :D I'm gonna add you right now!

Loving this story ! It's really good! :) I always look forward to the next chapter

@ TheHeroCupcake
Jk. I love you.

@ dizzy dreamer.
Thank you so much :) feel free to express how you feel.

@ TheHeroCupcake
Thanks bitch.

Hey girl!!! I just want to say that I love ur story and I really admire the girl name Melody, she is so cool!!!! And keep up with the hard work, I will always support ur story. Rock on!!!!

So I just read the first chapter and I like where you're going with the story.

@heatherlight
i need help with the layout. I try to change the background color and it wont change. The color changes to the other ones but not the main background.

It was good, the plot. I thought it was good.

@ heatherlight
But, what did yo think of the story i got going on?

Glad I could help :)

@ heatherlight
Well, thank you for your constructive criticism. I'll definitely use it :)

Okay, so first of all, you asked me to read this fanfiction because you wanted my opinion. Here it is. Please, don't be offended, I'm only trying to help you, this is constructive criticism.

The first thing I notices was the obcenely lack of simple sentences and the fact that you may love comas more than writing. Best friend goes separate. Don't use hahaha when you're describing, narrating or anything. Say "I laugh" "she laughs" "they laugh". Also, it's supposed to start with a capital since a period went before. If you're using ... use three, not two.

Microphone isn't a who or where, so it goes without a capital. You mean flip, not flick. Don't use capitals if you want to accent that word, use [ i][ /i]. "Moving to San Diego with my three favourite cousins;Melody, Tanya and Sara..." Don't give details about the clothing, it's boring and unnecessary. Try to use a new paragraph when the subject changes or when a chqaracter speaks, otherwise you'll have long paragraphs that bore people and people's sight.

So far, this is all I got for you. Try to get a layout, at least, form the layout page or, if you don't want any, I can make you one. Try to use everything I told you and it'll get better! I wish you the best of luck!

Okay, so first of all, you asked me to read this fanfiction because you wanted my opinion. Here it is. Please, don't be offended, I'm only trying to help you, this is constructive criticism.

The first thing I notices was the obcenely lack of simple sentences and the fact that you may love comas more than writing. Best friend goes separate. Don't use hahaha when you're describing, narrating or anything. Say "I laugh" "she laughs" "they laugh". Also, it's supposed to start with a capital since a period went before. If you're using ... use three, not two.

Microphone isn't a who or where, so it goes without a capital. You mean flip, not flick. Don't use capitals if you want to accent that word, use [ /i]. "Moving to San Diego with my three favourite cousins;Melody, Tanya and Sara..." Don't give details about the clothing, it's boring and unnecessary. Try to use a new paragraph when the subject changes or when a chqaracter speaks, otherwise you'll have long paragraphs that bore people and people's sight.

So far, this is all I got for you. Try to get a layout, at least, form the layout page or, if you don't want any, I can make you one. Try to use everything I told you and it'll get better! I wish you the best of luck!

@ enemysh1ps
No thank you! :)

Love it! Keep up the good work and thanks for asking me to read it!

@ productof4mexicans
Thank you!!! :D please tell your friends :)