July 10th, 2014 at 01:50am
This is an interesting story. I like how each chapter is a short, choppy, 'diary' like entry. You have a few spelling errors and some sentences that don't quite make sense. The only ones I remember for sure is in chapter two you say 'guardian angles' instead of
guardian angels' and in chapter 3 you wrote 'I pulled me leg closer' instead of 'I pulled my leg closer' The mysterious Hikey German family really does leave you hanging if they are real or not. Who are they? And why are they there? A neat, but somewhat eerie in a way story. I'll subscribe!
thank you so so.much. you have no idea what that means to me.