Okay, I'm not quite sure if this is a fanfiction or original fiction, because if it is a fanfiction, I'm not entirely sure on who the famous people are. No worries though.
Your layout was a bit hard to read, the font was a bit too dark for my eyes and I had to squint to read. The picture on the side is a bit distracting, but hey, to each their own. I saw a few mistakes, such as in the second chapter, "I'm sorry" Her breaking words surprised me. There should be a comma after the word sorry. Like this: "I'm sorry," Her breaking words surprised me. You see? I noticed it a few more times but it's nothing too bad, I did it myself when I first began writing.