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Nice work! :D

Holy moly, it started off sad and I was like, "oh no, it's going to be mega emotional" and it was but then the ending, so sweet. I love the description in this, it's amazing, you have a wonderful writing style.

One word I had on my mind while reading this was wow. I was extremely impressed by your ability to write description. Everything about this seemed very perfect, as if you chose the words very carefully. Nothing seems out of place, and everything fits the description well to create wonderful imagery.

I could almost feel like I was there during the storm and I felt a lot of emotion for this guy. I know how much it sucks to miss a chance and feel the regret after. So I'm glad you could write up a character so well to make a reader feel emotion for him.

I also enjoyed how you left the story open-ended. While I'm going to assume the 'someone' was the girl, it could be anyone and I love that we, as the readers, can form theories about it. Great job with this. :)

The I felt the hair on my body when he said: ““I love you... I didn't mean what I had said... I am so sorry.” he looked up into the rumbling sky.”
You know, most of the time, I read about other people’s love stories and I say: “Oh God, I’m gonna vomit.” But I enjoyed your vivid description and I didn’t at all feel like judging the guy or the writing.
Something I loved about it was the bully part. You see, people tend to write about bullies and being tormented, but as much as I know how it is being the victim of a bully, I can’t help but say “That’s pathetic. Get over yourself.’ But the thing about yours is that it doesn’t make me want to (Sorry to say the word again) vomit. I actually liked it, because it fit so perfectly into the rest of the text.
The one she had tried to fix herself to show mommy how big she was.
(It’s beautiful how you managed to add that to the text.)

So, I'm really glad I decided to read this. It is beautiful in its own little way. And I love just how perfectly the layout ties in. From, the swirls that look like drawn wind, to the picture of the rainy path.

The story was so amazing! It was so descriptive, it was like I could see all of it. Like a small movie in my head. I could feel his heartache, and I smiled at his memories with him...

And, I'm assuming the voice at the end is the girl... And, well, that's wonderful. A semihappy ending for a deep, deep story. This was wonderful, I'm glad I found it.

I really liked this! As said, it was simple but it expressed a lot. And I really liked the ending, especially because there wasn't the big, sappy ending that I'm used to reading (and have a soft spot for). I like how she said the same thing that she did when they expressed their feelings originally and you didn't even have to give a name to know that it was indeed her. Good job! :)

I really liked the ending of this. This whole thing was very simple, but very beautiful. At first, I couldn't figure out why he was sad, but as I read on it all became clear. In the end, his tears were for naught. I liked the simplicity of her return and the use of familiar words to get that point across. :)

This is a wonderful one shot, I haven't read many that have had so much emotion and imagery involved before, the way you worded everything was simply perfect in my eyes, as for flaws I didn't actually spot any everything seemed to be in the correct places and your spelling was good ... Great!

I spent forever trying to figure out where the chapter thingie is, until I realized it was the umbrella.
I want to hold you, kiss you, and love you like no other. I want to see that crooked smile of yours after you stumble forward from a night out of drinking. Most of all, I want you.
I just fell in love with the summary, oh god, it was beautiful. Drew me right in to the story.

This was a great one-shot though. I enjoyed reading it. You're so descriptive, it's amazing. So much imagery and that's lovely in a story/one-shot. You've done a fabulous job. c:

I found this completely gripping from beginning to end! The way you described everything perfectly created the right images in my mind! Simply amazing! Nice job ♥

Dear Grump Bunny you expressed so much in so little words. I liked how you described his thoughts as well as the imagery and the ending was superb. The voice he heard was hers, so nice. That scene made me smile. As for writing mistakes, at the paragraph which starts with I'm sorry, the next sentence doesn't make sense to me but maybe that's because English isn't my native language and I'm not that great at it, lol. And at this sentence, That was what gave her the strength to get up...though they simply pushed both of them down. , the "of" is missing. I honestly enjoyed reading this. ~Marian.

Dear Grump Bunny you expressed so much in so little words. I liked how you described his thoughts as well as the imagery and the ending was superb. The voice he heard was hers, so nice. That scene made me smile. As for writing mistakes, at the paragraph which starts with I'm sorry, the next sentence doesn't make sense to me but maybe that's because English isn't my native language and I'm not that great at it, lol. And at this sentence, That was what gave her the strength to get up...though they simply pushed both of them down. , the "of" is missing. I honestly enjoyed reading this. ~Marian.

This was so adorable! <3 I loved it! It's sad too. You did an awesome job!