Doll Face - Comments

I’m here as the new host for the ‘Show Me What You’ve Got’ contest.

Although this was kind of gruesome in a way, I really enjoyed it. There was so much disgust and hatred in this towards her own body that there was a resonating sadness, too. I didn’t pity her because what I felt went deeper than that. I felt… heartbroken and I even cringed when she took the nail file to her face because the pain was so overwhelming. I connected with the narrator so I felt all of this revulsion, this hatred, this pain and sorrow inside of her so it made this such a powerful drabble.

Your writing style was also so descriptive and beautiful. It was soft and flowing, but so sharp around the edges. You built on the emotions. So this was a really well-written drabble, good job!

I adore your writing style first off. You have a brilliant descriptive talent and I like the body dysmorphic disorder feel to this. People tell her she's attractive, but she just can't see it with her own eyes. I feel it's really common to find characters in stories who dislike their physical appearance, but you made it such an extreme for her that it works wonderfully without being cliche. I like that's she literally trying to file her face off. Someone I know makes the joke they're getting the cheese grater and taking their face off quite a bit so reading a character actually try to do that just resonated with me.

Her face was staring disgustedly into the mirror on her vanity, eyes squinting at the reflection, fingers prodding at all her imperfections.

This was my favourite line, mostly because it rhymed, but I also feel it captures her image with her obsession and her desire to be physically perfect.

I found this to be a really powerful story. Loved reading it.

This was really well written. The description of her was just the right amount and I really liked how you showed her emotions especially in that last paragraph. 'winced at pain' compliments 'eager' in that she isn't 2D, she's got depth and I like that :) Also, I don't know if you meant to, but in the end when it says 'with hands that trembled' and 'she smiled' I found you could interpret her feelings either as excited or afraid/sad which is really cool! I liked this piece, well done!! :)

I absolutely adore the way you've portrayed a single face in this amount of words. Normally description of characters is so tedious and boring at times but you've managed to make me want to continue to read and know what this person looks like. I love every word of this and seriously am about to stalk your page.

That was lovely. Excellent job!

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well, this is definitely very different.
your writing is really good, i look forward to chapitre deux, ma cherie!