@apocalyptic I'll be updxating soon! @atlasfinch thanks for the criticism! Trying to make the chapters longer so itll all make sense since it is at a faster pace! Will take your advice thanks tons!
This is an absolutely brilliantly written story. The plot grabs the reader and pulls us in head first; and your characters are realistic and likable. I only have a few pieces of constructive criticism; the first, you might want to add something to the top of a page to let the reader know when the viewpoint changes (Name the chapter their name, maybe?). Also, the story is fast-paced (which can be excellent), but it does make it slightly hard to follow scene changes sometimes. Besides those points, your story is excellently written and I look forward to you continuing it. Definitely worth a 'recommend '. Best wishes!
I just found this story and started reading it and so far it's pretty good. Although I have nocticed a few things. The spacing is a bit off. There are paragraphs apart when there doesn't mean to be and it is a bit hard to follow who is talking. Also the "secret". I don't get the change from chapter 2 and 3. One second their in the woods and the next second the main characters are having sex in her room? There needed to be a bit more detail in that. I also didn't get how A hates W sometimes but is totally chill other times. And then there is the other guy who is in her life who has a crush on her? I also suggest making it clearer who's POV the story is being told from. In some chapters the POV changes so suddenly. I would bold and underline whoever the story is being sold from and seperate it by a paragraph from the rest of the story. I really like this so far, but I feel like a bit more editing, revising and character work this story can go from a 3.5/5 to a 4.5/5. The plot is really great and I really want to see what happens between this love triangle.
@ KillerRed27 thank you for your advice. the way I wanted to write the story was to have flash backs and then present times, I kinda hoped it wasnt goin to be as confusing as I planned but I will be editing the chapters & will be putting a new one up today! Hope you keep reading and enjoy! Feel free to help give helpful criticism!
Its jumps around a lot which can get confusing. It got confusing in the one chapter where the pov changes halfway through the chapter. I had trouble figuring out the pov bit eventually did. Other than those things this story is great. It reeled me in at the forst chapter. Update soom