Psychotic - Comments

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I loved all the twists and turns in this. I thought everything was real and when she woke up I was honestly surprised. Your description is absolutely beautiful and I quickly fell in love with how you portrayed 'Snow White' and the old hag, as well as the doctors. The last line was absolutely amazing and really tied the whole story together in my opinion. Great job!

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Okay, this did not at all go the way that I thought it was going. I loved the whole fairytale vibe you set in the beginning, though even that was ominous. I’m just not sure where I was expecting this to go. I think I was expecting like a more Disney-esque ending. Like a Prince Charming or for Rosalyn to find sanctuary somewhere along the way of running way. You know, just something far more Disney friendly than what I was actually given. Which isn’t to say that I didn’t like the ending because I really, really did. It was a unique twist that surprised me and kept me reading.

I kind of wish it had been longer and a little more detailed, but that could just be because I liked the concept so much that I wish there was more of it. So all in all, good job!

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This is a great twist for Snow White. I liked how it began and the end was my favorite part. Thw words were very detailed which made me want to read more. I don't know if it was just me, but I felt like the story ended in some sort of cliffhanger because it made me think if Rosalyn was in fact sick and it was part of her imagination and her sickness or if the quote at the end was a description of some sort of curse of the "old woman" that transferred her in this reality instead of her own.

I'm not sure and I love to be this confuse. Great story!

This kind of reminded me of the movie Sucker Punch. How she was in a forest and an old woman had killed her, then suddenly it was all false and she was in a hospital and diagnosed with schizophrenia. It was an unexpected twist, great job.

@ Rebell
Thank you!

This is great. I loved the twist at the end! The images are great too, it's a really well done story. I really like it!

This is great. Very detailed, an i loved the twist. I honestly did not expect that to happen, so well done.

Interesting twist. I think this was very well done. Personally I would've liked to see more. :)

This is amazing. Like, really good. I absolutely loved the very last part. It was the cherry on top of an already great story. Such a good spin on the fairytale, making the character a thousand time more interesting than the character she is based upon. Well done for that first win, and good luck with the other contests.

Snow White is probably one of my favourite tales of all time and I love your adaptation for it. I always like to think of what old tales and fables would be like if there was a dark twist on them, or if the princesses were just imagining it all like Rosalyn is here. It's a really strange but effective twist on an original story, and you've handled the writing of it beautifully. You've taken an old story and added a truly unique twist on it and I think it works really well. The last line in particular is one of my favourites. It's just so true and ties the two parts of the story together really well. Definitely left a lasting impression.

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*short story contest*
Beautiful layout, wonderful title.
The beginning seemed a bit confusing to me, as I thought that you didn't probably write an old-fashioned traditional fairy tale, as the title was "Psychotic". But as the story continued, I could recognise Snow White as a "role model" for Rosalyn. It was a slight bit scary, especially when she met that old woman and almost died. That part of the story was especially well-written.
I enjoyed this so much. Your stories are incredible, plots are unexpected and your writing is so smooth. You are talented and it's always a pleasure to read your work.
When she then woke up in the hospital, that was very much unexpected. I had started to "believe" the story about a princess who is dying in the woods. So then it made me feel betrayed and psychotic when I realised that it wasn't the truth. Excellent!
And the fact that she has been living there for so many years..
Your last line was again perfection and I don't just have enough words to describe what I just felt when I read this story. I guess I'll just have to say that this was an amazing story and the only suggestion so far; Keep up the good work!
Xx Ninahx

You are so talented, I loved this. Your style of writing is very unique and I enjoy that. You're just amazing!

@ Psychotic Secrets
Thank you!

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This is really good. My kind of story

@ bloecleah
Why thank you, dear!

love love love. great imagery.

This is brilliant. I totally love your writing style and the way it just changed, I was there like "WHAT!" Great read, really enjoyed it. Wish it could have been like a story. It would be very interesting.

Oh my gosh. I was not expecting that at all. I mean, holy crap! that was awesome! Well not awesome for Rosalyn, but the story itself was awesome.
I just love how you tied the mental disorder in there! Truly a unique story. :D

Okay, when I first saw the title, I was thinking it'd be about a person who is well, psychotic. Not that it'd be loosely based off Snow White. But I'm glad you choose to base this off the classic story. I love how you used descriptions and made it seem a bit evil. I love Rosalyn's character. It's like she's in a delusion of being a princess, only to wake up and found out she has a mental disease.

You did such a great job on this!