Momentous - Comments

Ouch, my heart started to hurt. So many tears are not good for the human soul. It's so well done and was really impacting.

Just wow. The way you stay off with something so simple. And yet it had me hooked.

I love the layout. So simple, yet so lovely. Maybe it's the guy in the banner, I don't know. Either way, I like it.

You start off with such a simple sentence, and I love that. It drew me right in, especially with the description that you use afterwards (I loved the descriptions of his tattoos!), you really paint a vivid picture. I love the little interaction you have between Blair and Taylor with the cigarettes, it definitely seems very realistic. The repetition of the sexy smirk really is quite interesting, it almost gives the piece a sense of a repeating cycle, a common factor linking all of the littered memories together. I also love how you can see the changes in their relationship as you read further and further in. It seems cute at first, but as you read more and more into it, it does seem like a massively one-sided relationship. The ending is kind of heart-wrenching as well, but I love how you tie the title into the end, I really do.

I'll be announcing the winners of the contest later on tonight, so good luck!

Wow, this blew me away. Beautifully written and hard to shake; that's what I love about oneshots. This takes the cake :) I kept reading it falling more in love with Blair and Taylor's story with every carefully chosen word. Then as abruptly but unassuming as it began it came to an end. Fantastic job, you really are a natural writer!

awwww:(
but good:D

This was beautiful! Loved it (:
brilliant writing too!

x

For my dear friends Tracy and Helen.
I AM HALF OF THAT.

He walked around with one plastered on his face like it was its default setting. I can just see this sexy mother fucker.

Cue the sexy smirk and the cocky way he said, “So you have noticed me.”

“Hard not to. You’re a fucking show-off.”
THAT'S THE BEGINNINGS OF TRUE LOVE

I told him so the first time he kissed me.

He was squirming beneath me ten minutes later as I ran my hand over his bare chest while I fucked him.
that escalated quickly AND SEXILY

When I found Taylor he was drinking a beer on the porch and I was blissfully drunk.

That was when he told me that I didn’t need him.
TAYLOR *WAIL*

“Greta, from work.” The sister of my ex.
FUCKIN GRETA

“We’re momentous,"

“I think you mean momentary.”
OH LORD. CAUSE THERE'S SUCH A BIG DIFFERENCE AND IT HURTS

And my name was tattooed on the aorta.

I loved it beyond belief.
My aorta says ALICE

I pretended I understood and wasn’t caught between the meanings of two different words.
OH GOD THAT HURTS


We were in the park when he collapsed.

When his heart gave out, and that sexy smirk was eternally fixed on his face, we were in the park.

And I did understand.
I AM DEAD. I AM GONE. DEAD.

OMFG I HATE YOU WHAT IS THIS PAIN.



/okaycomposeyourself

A sexy smirk.
I lo-ove that you used this throughout (omg I can't do this because crying)

“Absolutely,” he replied then blew a cloud of smoke right in my face.
Sexy friggin' imagery what the hell Alice

He was squirming beneath me ten minutes later as I ran my hand over his bare chest while I fucked him.
You're such a farking tease!!

He told me I was the kind of guy who said nothing and said everything.

And that I had his heart.
I SHOULDN'T HAVE READ IT THROUGH BEFORE COMMENTING MY HEART PHYSICALLY HURTS I HATE YOU SO MUCH WHY.

That was when he told me that I didn’t need him.
WHAT IS THIS. WHERE DO YOU KEEP THESE WORDS.

“I think you mean momentary.”

He told me I didn’t understand.
asdfghjkl; (see above)

A sexy smirk was absent on his face.
Repetition I love repetition.

And my name was tattooed on the aorta.

I loved it beyond belief.
OMFG ALL THIS BUILD UP AND THEN YOU JUST KILL ME.

“We’re like this one moment. It could end at any second. But this moment is so fucking important and it means everything.”
SOBBING.

When his heart gave out, and that sexy smirk was eternally fixed on his face, we were in the park.

WHAT HAVE YOU DOOOONE.