Right Here in My Arms - Comments

@DommyDesario Thank you, I appreciate that. I will look into re-reading and fixing it all.

I found this story a bit hard to read. Even at the beginning of the first chapter I stumbled upon many grammatical and syntax errors, which tend to make it very distracting. I also thought there was a lot of repetition of words and ideas, that could possibly have been changed or re-worded to express the emotion a bit better.

I managed to read up to the second chapter, but unfortunately, it wasn't any better. Maybe you should consider re-reading and editing these mistakes before posting online. I would possibly reconsider reading it.

I found this story a bit hard to read. Even at the beginning of the first chapter I stumbled upon many grammatical and syntax errors, which tend to make it very distracting. I also thought there was a lot of repetition of words and ideas, that could possibly have been changed or re-worded to express the emotion a bit better.

I managed to read up to the second chapter, but unfortunately, it wasn't any better. Maybe you should consider re-reading and editing these mistakes before posting online. I would possibly reconsider reading it.

dilema especially because we still don't know why ensio seems to dislike ville. Jealousy envy or real worry. Oh what a plot!

why Ville don't wanna say anything i just don't get it

Just finished reading it all and it was great so far. I really can't wait to read the next chapter. Its a unique story line which makes it really interesting to read because you're not sure whats going to happen.

@ ladychemical
My apologies. I will go fix that now. Thanks. :)

Hmm. I like it so far. Only major pet peeve is that Ville doesn't like Nine Inch Nails. But I'll just pretend he's wearing a Type O Negative shirt or perhaps a Black Sabbath one. Its an interesting concept for a fan fic.

hope there is an update soon : ?

XD God, I love this story. What a way to get out of explaining whether or not they slept together

Holy crud! The morning after! Wonder what Row-s reaction wil 'll be when Ville walks in! Wonder what Ville will say! Gah! So excited for more!

i can see a disaster in the making in them going drinking together >< I can't wait to see where you're going with everything so far. Waiting for your next update <3

Oooh! Likes spending time with Ville! Wonder what will happen when they start drinking! Excited for more!

What did he mean by Ville being a bad influence?!?!? I so like your story so much snd hope you continue writing!

hope you continue writing this, im trying to get a few final things done before school ends and from what i read of this i think i am going to like it=] hope to see more soon!

@ Hilltop Hi-Jinks
Eeeep! Thanks a ton! I'm glad that you're enjoying it so far! :D

@ ilikewalls
Haha, right?

Doesn't date her fathers clients pssshhhh we will see about that hahaha

I'm hooked :D
You put a lot of detail into your writing and you don't try and rush the plot (which happens more often than not in fanfics ><) IT'S GREAT! Can't wait for more.