This is really good. I find it to reflect Soul Eater's characters perfectly. And the added ocs and new characters gives it a nice vibe. Best Soul Eater fanfic I've read
August 29th, 2014 at 07:20am
You did a very good job with the summary. I liked the short-stops with each sentence, it was a really great way to draw people in.
First Chapter
Already I'm loving the descriptions that you're using. I'm not the best with grammatical issues, but so far I haven't spotted anything. (I'll be typing as I read. Also, I apologize for being late. I was rather busy yesterday.)
This chapter was really good and I'm actually going to subscribe to it so I can read more of it later. I couldn't find anything that honestly needed fixing. Even the switch in point of view was really smooth, and obviously different because of the personalities.