Young & Reckless - Comments

well hello, I'm here for round 2 of gift swap!

First of all, let me tell you that I don't often read original fictions. I started reading your story with a little motivation. But girl, let me tell you that I really enjoy your story so far. I love the plot, and trust me...when I love an original fiction like yours, it means it is really good :) You have a new subscriber!

First of all, I really love the characters, mostly Hayden and Anna. I can relate to some aspects of their personnalities. I enjoy seeing a little bit of myself in the stories I read. We understand the feelings of your characters! They are all different and we get attached to them, which is a good thing. I really see myself into Anna, and I really hope she'll get to love herself more as the story goes on1

I also love how your story is about a delicate subject: teen pregnancy. We see how hard it can be for the mom, the dad, the families, etc. We don't talk about it enough, and you're doing it in a good way! Congrats :)

About other aspects of your story, I think the length of the chapters is perfect! Plus, the paragraphs are not too big so it is easy for the readers to read. I also love the titles of your chapters! Just the main title of the story makes you want to read it.

Well, to conclude, I think that you are an amazing author. I sure will read more of your works. Keep up the good work <3

Hi there! *Comment Swap*
Sorry about the delay dear, but here I am. Your layout is really very pretty, kinda unique. And you write very well too. The story started brilliantly, but I'll admit I couldn't actually like any character. I mean Granger was despicable, Annamarie confused me and Hayden was just... Anyway Holden was okay I guess. Maybe I'll like the Hayden guy if I read further, only read three chapters till now. But I commend you on the story line and the delivery of the plot. I will read on, so I'm subscribing (and recommending!)to see where this goes.

I hope Anna will become better and will stop hating herself. Very well done! Keep this up! I'll be following the story, so keep going girl! :)

Before I go into some constructive criticism, I want to tell you this is kind of a cute story. It has that ABC Family appeal, the whole "he's actually nice" thing. You got potential with this story, and if you fix a few things then you will be golden.

First off, in the first chapter, I like how you started off the first chapter with a rhetorical question. You describe love well to pull the reader in. But I don't know if Polyvore links are necessary. Let the reader imagine what your character is wearing, you know? It seems a little silly.

For the rest of the story, there's a lot of dialogue in here. Decrease the amount of dialogue so it isn't overbearing. If you show instead of tell with more description, it will pull the reader in even more. Let us know more about what Anna thinks, rather than her telling us what is going on.

Anyway, like I said before, this is a cute story. Keep working on it and people will love it. Good luck!