A little Jaime/Kellin action never hurt. If anything it's kind I cute how protective Jame is of Kellin. Wow, Vic's an asshole and I can't imagine him being able to have Kellin now. If anything I'm kind if rooting for Kellin and Jaime.
I know what you mean. Im sorry I am usually in a rush to get it typed out due to studying for finals. But really I appreciate your tips, :) I will soon start breaking it off into paragraphs.
I really like this story, and I hate to be this girl, but I have some complaints/tips.
Try doing paragraphs and breaking dialouge out of a big blob. It makes it neater and easier to read as well as giving it body. Thanks and keep up the good work!