Yeah Boy and Doll Face - Comments

Quinncado is needed.

That's cause Jaime sounds like the perfect guy for Kells and not Vic...

I dunno it's kinda like what about Kellic??? D: but then it's like idek with Vic, cause he just seems so confusing

Anywhore I love this story ♥ update soon please

A little Jaime/Kellin action never hurt. If anything it's kind I cute how protective Jame is of Kellin.
Wow, Vic's an asshole and I can't imagine him being able to have Kellin now. If anything I'm kind if rooting for Kellin and Jaime.

Hey thanks a lot :).

I know what you mean. Im sorry I am usually in a rush to get it typed out due to studying for finals.
But really I appreciate your tips, :) I will soon start breaking it off into paragraphs.

I really like this story, and I hate to be this girl, but I have some complaints/tips.

Try doing paragraphs and breaking dialouge out of a big blob. It makes it neater and easier to read as well as giving it body. Thanks and keep up the good work!