Rooftop Musings - Comments

Ah, this broke my heart! I definitely wasn't expecting something so heartbreaking, especially with that ending. I had been expecting a huge love confession and maybe a smooch or two at the end, but NOPE! I did really love this twist, though. You also went along with the picture perfectly, which I enjoyed.

They seem like perfect friends, but unrequited love can be such a bitch, and I feel really bad for her and the fact that she can never have him (or, maybe not never), but can't have him at the moment because he doesn't feel that way about her. I think many people have been in that kind of situation and you captured the feeling perfectly! I loved this!

Okay I've been meaning to read Where the Wind Takes Us for a billion years now BUT NOW I REALLY HAVE TO because this was fantastic.

I adore your style of writing. This felt really raw, almost stream of conscious-like, and it was great to read. I completely related to the character and my heart was breaking for her as soon as I realized what was going on. The beginning of the story kind of felt like a "aw they're getting together yay" moment, but then as I read on and realized what was really going on I felt so sad for her. I feel like lots of people have been in that situation before and you captured the emotion super well.

And the last line, ugh, I FELT IT SO HARD. I looooved it so much.

Fantastic job, lovely. Now excuse me while I go binge read Where the Wind Takes Us

WAIT A SEC
DID THIS ACTUALLY HAPPEN BEFORE WtWTU
WHAT
HOW DID I NOT KNOW THIS

Here judging the first round of Sixth Time's the Charm.

I could have sworn I commented on this beforehand, but evidently I haven't. I think I have read it before, but I'm still as equally impressed as I was beforehand. What I like most about this piece is that it seems to start out as if it is going to be a super-cute story where the two kids you want to get together finally do get together but as you read, you realise that it's going the opposite way from any expectations you have. I think this seems more realistic to me than the cheesiest of romance stories because I've been in this position before myself and it just seems more likely to happen than them getting together would be. I'm also not the biggest fan of stories that have the two best friends getting together because again, it seems more realistic that they won't. The entire piece just seems so real to me, y'know? I feel like I can relate to both sides of the story and I really like that in pieces. You've got a wonderful way of describing things and it really brings across the narrator's character. Great job!

Everything about this story just ties in perfectly; the title, the layout (even though is gives me a weird feeling of vertigo) and of course the scene. It's all just very polished, and yet the actual content is so emotionally raw.

I can truly understand and relate to the protagonist. I haven't been in exactly the same position, but it's close enough and her wounds hurt like it's just happened to me too. The little descriptions of Mick just illustrate her love for him, and even her casual conversation is so appropriate to the situation - always trying to play it cool.

I just want to slap some sense into Mick though. I really do. You kind of wonder how anyone can be so blind, even though they suspect a 'crush'.

This is just so realistic, so heartfelt and I just want to read more. I'll probably give the sequel a read actually, that's how much I loved this. So .Good.

Good luck in the contest!

This is cute. I can't say that I felt a lot of depth in it, because it's pretty cliche - but don't take that as an insult, cliche is not terrible. I loved the way this girl described her love for this boy, this boy that she'd go to the ends of the earth for. That was genuine and true and special. I know that feeling. The fact that loving him that much kind of worries her meshes with the fact that she's literally tottering off a roof. It's symbolic, if you get what I'm saying.

The only thing that put me off was how Mick just up and started rambling off the things she had done for him right after she thought about them herself. It just seemed...overly cute, to be honest. But, I still enjoyed it as a whole, well done.

Judging ends on the 20th. Any contest winners will be further notified by me.

Hello! Sorry for taking so long with your comment and recommendation, but here it is!

This is adorable. I loved it to bits and pieces. It's short, but it's just perfect. Gah, I sound stupid. Like, it's really realistic. I feel like I can understand the way their relationship is because of the dialogue they shared. The fact that she's so into him with all that she does for him and whatnot, it makes the heartbreak so much more intense, and it seemed so real to me when he sighed of relief and was saying, "Thank god." That's exactly how I imagine guys to be when something like this happens. And the ending just got to me! Like it completely ripped out my heart!

"I laugh in response, but it’s a forced laugh to cover up the fact that ten minutes ago, my heart was intact but now, it’s completely and irrevocably broken."

That line. That line is perfection.

Overall, this was cute and I loved reading it! Definitely worth a recommendation!

Wow okay.

This is perfect. Like, the whole thing is something that so many people could relate to and I, myself, have friends like Mick. And it's like you know you shouldn't like them, that they're actually kind of dicks, but you fall for them anyways.

And just you setting the scene and everything. In such a short piece, you could see exactly how their relationship is and their interactions are clear and idk this is perfect okay.

Aw this is really cute and sad. Boys like Mick make me wanna punch them in the face. But you write really well and I'm hope this helped with your writer's block, because, it's really really good :)

I really like this.
I used to read oneshots all the time but this one resonates so perfectly.
It's such a sweet and tender moment between friends, not-quite-lovers, a simple yet very complex one.
And I pictured everything vividly; the way he stopped her from toppling off the roof and cracking her skull
open and then his close proximity to her as they're in that sort of embrace. Splendid.