Pick up the Broken Pieces - Comments

My story be updated! @ grow a pair

@ grow a pair
It really does suck. But I don have to so I probably still will post like 1/4 chapters

@ Underestimated Soul
Ah, that sucks.

I'm just saying though, that maybe in the future try to write full chapters before posting them up?

@ grow a pair
I couldn't finish because I was really tied and couldn't think straight. I don even know if I can finish today. I seriously woke up with a major headache.

@ Underestimated Soul
Ah, that makes sense. If I was you I wouldn't post half a chapter because people who do read your stories will probably not subscribe or bother continue reading if it doesn't make sense, y'know?

Sounds good!

@ grow a pair
I haven't finished the chapter but I will today.

When I clicked on your story I wasn't sure what to expect, but I have to say that the idea of it intrigues me. I've never read a 'kidnapped' type story, so yours will be the first . I think your writing is promising, but there are a few spelling/grammar mistakes that could be fixed.

Also, I was confused about the ending. Why was the girl ashamed if she's been kidnapped? What does she have to be ashamed about - she hasn't done anything but sneak out of the house. If that's the case, I'd make it a bit clearer because I had to stop and read it a few times to understand it.

I don't usually read stories like this, but I'm going to subscribe because like I said before, I'm intrigued.