Mirrors - Comments

Oh man, I got chills! That layout, freaky! But I like it! I LOVE horror so this was great!
This was so realistic! You're a great writer! It's a unique concept that I haven't read about before so that was very refreshing!

Oh man, this was a creepy story. At first, I was like this layout is creepy but it pulls the reader in and makes them want to read the story. So that's good. The one thing is the text is really close to the edges of the black background which is a little distracting but that's the only problem.

The story itself is crazy. It was unpredictable and I didn't know what to expect from the little piece of text in the summary. But I love how silly and naive this young girl is. She didn't listen to other people and wanted to test things out for herself. I was really impressed by your talent to create a well-written character in such a small amount of text.

The ending was the best part and it really pulls the whole story together. I feel really uncomfortable after reading this story but that's okay. This was really great!

Holy crap. This layout creeps me the hell out. It's like creepy to the max, and I love it, that face in the mirror and the girl's obvious cluelessness. Just wow, and the quote in the summary just gives me chills.

I love how naïve this girl is, going in to test this legend. How she really wants to get into the feel of it by keeping her lights low and being as quiet as she can, you write this out so well that even though i'm in my room with the sun on me and listening to music, I feel all that is muted as I read.

I was intrigued when I got to what the legend was about and all that. Demons in mirrors, and tricking them? I think that would honestly make for a pretty impressive chaptered story. "Missing kids, people disappearing near bodies of water and in their own homes (by basically anything that could make a reflection)" that would be so cool.

Honestly, I think my heart might have been beating really fast while reading this, I was so into it and got so enticed by the fact that this girl was so ready to test this legend out.

So I think this was fantastic. I really believe you could attempt to make a whole chaptered story out of it, that being a prologue of some sorts. It was really great, and gave me chills and the creeps for sure. I really like this and if you ever write anything like this again, you should totally post it so I can read it.

Okay so when I first looked at the layout, I was pretty interested almost immediately. It’s a very attractive layout, you have an eye for what looks nice. I love the picture, it’s sassy and mysterious, and it just has that little bit of weird thrown in there. The only possible thing I could find wrong with the layout is that the words are pretty close to the edge of the text box, but that’s barely even an issue! Since it was a nice setting, I instantly was drawn into wanting to read all about it.

This was a wonderful concept. I definitely got this sort of superstitious cult vibe within the first few chapters, especially around the time where she’s reflecting on picking up a new legend. Just the way she progressed through that, the way that she moves from legend to legend is strange. It’s strange in a delightful way because it tells me that she’s an odd character, and I’m not sure what exactly I should be expecting from her. I could see this especially when you said;

“The legend she was experimenting with tonight was one that had only recently gotten popular online.”

That’s just delightfully straight to me. Also, I can’t tell you how much I was impressed by the little unique knacks throughout the story. The legend about the mirrors was something so unique and new to me, and it was very refreshing to read something about it in a story! Definitely not something I expected when I first opened the layout, but I was actually pleasantly surprised with how it turned out. I love the curiosity of Leanna’s character. She goes chasing down legends because she has something to prove to herself, and she likes to peer her nose into things she probably shouldn’t. She’s raw and realistic, she’s down to earth and she’s odd. But when it comes down to it, she’s scared and frightened just as much as anybody in the universe would be. She’s realistic, and she’s something I’m able to relate to.

The ending was wonderful! It totally got me! I actually read over it a few times because it was so raw and it was actually so damn realistic! It had loads of creepster in it, and I could literally imagine it so perfectly in my head, that I’ll probably have nightmares and avoid mirrors for the rest of the week! Amazing job.

Thank you for entering and good luck!