The Golden Quartet: Year 4 - Comments

I love this story so much<3

I love this story so much<3

Well! It has been a year. Good to know that my comments have been taken into account- or perhaps you just read my mind. You Occlumency expert, you. Sirius is definitely my favorite. It's just written on my heart, I suppose. Astrid is second; I have missed her. Athena kind of annoys me, but I guess that's kind of her job. MORE MORE MORE.

Haha, Harry's so dramatic. My favorite line was this:

“That’s because it doesn’t exist – Hermione’s just made it up,” Astrid stated, tossing the badge back in the box. “Hermione, this is just ridiculous.” Imagine Astrid being the practical one!

Hmm. You know, I don't remember Fred and Athena starting to date. I definitely think that one of them should catch onto the Moody thing because...come on, he's their uncle and locked up in a trunk. Astrid is channeling her father for sure...heartwarming, really. I'd still like more Sirius, but I suppose I'll turn back to the prequel at some point...still, I reaaaaaaaaaally want a father-daughter moment sometime soon. Those two together is like puppies and baby kittens times infinity. I am curious as to why Crouch didn't kill Astrid, assuming that was him. I want to know soon! I think it would be great to hold off on the romance between the teens too- middle-school-age is seriously too young for serious relationships.

Omg, Mad-Eye's their UNCLE!!!!! That changes everything!!!

“’Someone’? Sweet of you to sugar-coat it, Harry, but I think we all know who this ‘someone’ is. You.” Astrid crossed her arms and leaned against the wall.

Favorite line. I'm beginning to see what you mean by the story needing an extra character to add in some blunt comments. The rest of the chapter seemed to consist of...well, talking. I want an Astrid/Sirius scene soon. Those two are just awesome together.

I like the fight. the rest was a bit uneventful. I may have to re read the rest until you update again. Hm...specific death eater in mind there? Gonna invent one?

Mm...this one wasn't as fun. Nothing really to quote, unfortunately. The colors are nice- it helps one picture the nice sunny scene. My cat just loves stabbing her little paws into my stomach. Anyway- I think maybe you could have changed the flying carpets to...oh, I don't know. Self-pouring teapots? Um...flying beds? Mary Poppins? It just seems a little more J.K. Rowling than usual and a little less you. Now I'm thirsty and my cat decided to use me as a permanent cushion. Gotta deal with that now...

CHAPTER DOS:

Why didn't Sirius just give his letter to Athena (in case Astrid loses it or does something funny) to give to Harry instead? I suppose it was faster since Harry got to the Burrow later, but you didn't specify the gap so I can't be sure.

OH NO >:( don't you dare let him die. You can't do that to your own characters after they had to go 13 years without him. You have the power to right a wrong and you'd SO better do it! *glares with her hands on her hips*

CHAPTER ONE: My favorite lines and thoughts

“Filch? That old geezer is still around, is he?”

Like the time she said she couldn’t cook because she had been temporarily blinded by one of Voldemort’s followers, even though your mother had just been to a Quidditch game

Athena and Amilia stood there in front of the two with their arms crossed. “Great. Two of them.” Amilia mumbled.

AHAHA- I just re-read this line while picking quotes and really imagined it happening. :D "Sirius was sitting down on the floor in the hallway, looking up at his daughter who was leaning against the wall and smirking"

“Oh, okay. Good. Lie to me, I like that.” Astrid beamed.

“On second thought, I am actually hungry- ah! No! STOP!” Astrid looked mortified as her parents quickly pulled away from each other. I think just the 'STOP' would have been more dramatic.

Astrid didn’t get that quality from either of her parents. Both Sirius and Amilia were actually sensitive to bad emotional situations. ---that sounds terrible. I'll have to look back and see how they did in fights...

“Good.” Amilia said with a smirk. ---I like this line. It's one of the only ones that shows some of her...bad side, I guess, since Sirius' is so blatantly obvious and she seems to be so...good. Motherly and whatnot.