Sweet Dreams - Comments

I loved this.
I really loved how we didn't need to know everything about the show to understand it, for the simple reason that I almost know nothing about it xD

But anyway, normally, things that are pretty much sex are not that much my cup of tea, but I feel like you were able to put a spin on it that made me quite enjoy it.

I did spot some mistakes, that made me cringe but it wasen't that bad, it's not like it made me want to stop reading your story.

Although, I do feel like the dream plot is over used, I really do but I like how they simply didn't wake up and it's the end, I love how you made her think about what it meant and all, I really appreciate that part in the story.

Oh and, your banner, i'm just in love.

In the end, this was a very solid story.

The summary isn’t that interesting but it’s okay. Most of the summary is more on fragments so it’s better if you could turn those into sentences.

I got closer but no one was there. Soon, a pair of strong arms gently wrapped around me from behind, snaking themselves possessively around me, as well as a pair of lips gently kissing my neck softly.
I believe ‘got’ isn’t the right word to use in the first sentence. It should be replaced with the word ‘went’ instead. The second sentence, on the other hand, could be rewritten again. ‘Soon’ isn’t the right transitional device for the sentence. ‘Suddenly’ is much better. You also became redundant in the second sentence. ‘Wrapped around me from behind’ and ‘snaking themselves possessively around me’ are similar – almost the same actually. You could just combine the two so it would be better to read.

If something, I felt the feelings I was trying so hard to suppress showing themselves as his lips touched my neck yet again, sucking and licking, obviously living a love-mark.
‘If something’ doesn’t fit in the sentence at all.

‘’Because you want to be with me as much as I do love, and even though you hate the thought of it, you yearn for it as well.’’ And I closed my eyes as I heard his rough voice whispering those words to my ear.
Without the ‘and’, the sentence is fine. There should also be a comma after ‘do’.

In a swift motion we were on the bed and I sighed against his lips.
There should be a comma after ‘motion’.

And even though I had been secretly hoping for me and him to end up together, deep in my heart I knew there was no way for that to happen, no matter how much he love me or how much I tried to fool myself that I didn’t feel anything about him, it will always be him.
Those sentences should be divided into separate ones since they’re complete sentences, not clauses nor fragments.

He lips found my neck again where he left small butterfly kisses till he reached the valley between my breasts. With his strong hands, he spread me legs apart and I trembled at the thought of what was going to happen and how much I wanted this even if it was only for once.
‘He’ should be ‘his’ and ‘me’ should be ‘my’.

I noticed that you became redundant in some sentences. In one sentence, you used ‘gently’ twice when it could have been used once. You used ‘as’ a lot when you could have used words such as ‘with’ or ‘when’. There are some sentences that could have been separated but you connected them with conjunctions. They could have been connected with prepositions or separated into different sentences instead. Furthermore, I saw that you used two apostrophes instead of quotation marks. Apostrophes are meant to show possession while quotation marks are used for dialogues. Overall, it’s a nice story but it could use some editing and proofreading.

OH MY GOD A KLAROLINE FIC THIS IS SO EXCITING

I adore The Vampire Diaries, but I love Klaroline even more. I mean, in the beginning I was a Delena shipper, but after five minutes of Klaroline, I fell head over heels for that pair. KLAROLINE FOR LIFE! <3

This was written beautifully, and I loved that I could imagine Klaus saying those words in his sexy accent to Caroline. The sex scene is one of the many scenes I've wanted for the show to do But I think the way you wrote it was just perfection. You portrayed the pair very true to the show and I think that's what I love the most about it. I absolutely adored this!

Oh, you have indulged my love of Klaroline with this little beauty! This was good! Damn! You describe Klaus so well! I'm dying for them to get together properly, VD writers if you're listening make my ship real! Haha
Awesome job my love!

Yay! I really liked this. I've never seen the Vampire Diaries or know who any characters are but this was still lovely! =D I liked the part where she bit his shoulder during sex haha that's kind of hot.

I ship klaroline so hard, so I absolutely had to read this. I have been dying for them to end up together. I seriously want to see Tyler get killed already, he is such a damn cry baby. Plus Klaus is one sexy piece of ass.

The scene between them was amazing. Klaus totally snuck into her head to participate in that dream. ;) I love that this moment between them was very real, even though it happened just like it would in a dream. They would definitely be completely wrapped up in each other, completely lost in the fact that it was finally happening. Ahh. Love it.

This was awesome. I absolutely loved it.
:D
You are an amazing writer.
I loved it!

Very interesting, made me think. I will sleep now and read the other two when I wake. This is very good as a short read or if it was a story.

Your banner though, I'm in love .

This chapter was just so amazing by the way, It drew me in. You should make this into a story. =D