New Beginnings - Comments

Also I think you should read it out loud to yourself. Does it sound right? does it flow?

Also I think you should read it out loud to yourself. Does it sound right? does it flow?

"So today is the first day of school and I'm really nervous about my first day." this doesn't sound right. Repeating the words first day in the sentence.
i think the story could be really good. I feel that your characters need more depth, and your writing more description. Other then that good job