Charming - Comments

This is FABULOUS. I'm glad I read it. Well done!

@ Aisdais
ahh thank you! that helps a lot & i will look out for those errors. :)

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First off, I'm a fan of Doctor Who and I think you did a great job of capturing the 11th Doctor in this story. I like the descriptions that used, especially when Snow first sees the Doctor. There are a few grammatical problems (missing a few words here and there) but nothing that is really distracting. Great job. :D

@ Wispy
thank you very much!
i'm in the process of revising this, so thank you!
will keep everything you said in mind :)

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Okie dokie. This was nice. I'm a fan of doctor who so this was a nice surprise from comment swap ^^ Any ways, you have good description, but you do repeat certain words a lot. Like when your talking about one of the characters, try to us he, her, she, and him more instead of just using their name over and over. Also, your layout is nice, but fairly plain. I suggest adding a simple picture background or coloring the test box. You don't have to, just my opinion. But over all, good job! keep it up! :3